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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 761
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 508



    Description:
       I don't actually like this but yeah I guess I wanted to submit something and I like this guy that I am not supposed to like cause my sister told me that I couldn't like him cause she wouldn't like that and man this is so insane cause he is pretty and he has long hair and man I hate that I can't like him...well I hate that I can't pursue him I guess.Bah!


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    You fuck
    I hate that fact that I don't mind if I'm lonely
    Wondering why I think that you are so great

    You fuck

    I hate that I want you to know me
    Wondering why I am here this late

    You fuck

    Why is your hair so long and pretty
    You seem to throw that teddy bear just at me

    You fuck

    I didn't want you
    But now I do
    And if you read this
    It's not about you




    Submitted on 2005-04-30 22:28:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't think thisis one of your best poems by far, but sometimes you need that bit of venting so it is good for that .
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    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      ths is a good vent poem. very blunt and to the point about how you feel about this person, which is always good to let out a little steem. and I think with a little more creativity, and less strees about the person this would be Great. but it's still good...
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]
      This was differnet but good.It's a good vent piece the flow seemed to be off though the whole poem but whatever.hopeto hear from you
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm...
    this is an interesting poem, it seems as if you have mixed feelings about this person - maybe it's time for you to think about what you really want. Do you or do you not want him? It's all up to you.
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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