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    dots Submission Name: Walking Away...You know it hurtsdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 1007
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       This is a bit random I think...I don't know I think that I like this, there are definately emotions here.


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    dotsWalking Away...You know it hurtsdots
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    Limping away and I know that I should help
    Your heart was broken by me
    I wasn't sure that I could have that affect
    I didn't know you could bleed

    every wound...seemed drained of emotion
    every scar...seemed healed that day

    When I met you...I closed my eyes
    I woke up from dozing and in that moment I knew
    You tried to pretend that you never loved me
    And I tried to pretend I didn't know you did

    every wound...out of reach
    every scar...not my fault

    You walked away and I knew I should be there too
    Just another broken one to crack underneath the lies that we wanted to hear
    Just another word and I swear you were so beautiful
    But you walked away and now I know that I can too




    Submitted on 2005-04-30 22:35:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I mean this good, has lots of emotion. Hence, such long sentences..it's about letting go..i am not really good at that, though ;)

    All in all, this flows well.good work :)
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool I dig it. Really nice.
    But you walked away and now I know that I can too... Works for this.
    One thing...
    After the word lies , Iwould cut out the rest of it that line.
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is full of emotion - but it's good that you can write what you feel. It's hard to get hurt and/or hurt someone else but at least we learn from our mistakes, don't we?
    | Posted on 2005-04-30 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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