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    dots Submission Name: speechlessdots

    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       this is for how i have trouble putting my thoughts into the right words

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    thoughts caress this empty brain
    echo off the walls
    expressions withheld abandoned to wither
    ideas left unspoken

    the tongue strains for words to say
    messages dependent on implications
    to listen requires a gift of understanding

    Submitted on 2005-05-01 01:17:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am a fan of short poems. I have seen so many people write things like 'this is pretty good for a short poem' as if short is a negative thing. I think it is more of a preference rather than a true critique.
    My favorite line in this poem is also the most poerful one 'messages dependent on implications' Wow, I wonder if anyone can see how much that says about the human psyche. We are so dependent on what we think other people are thinking.
    | Posted on 2005-08-11 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      I can understand this write completely. I have the same problem at times. That's why I like writing.. I can express better in poems than in actual coversations.. Weird huh?
    And then, there's always that fear of your words not coming out as you intended them too. An anjoyable read.
    Take Care!
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good..not much of a 'poem' but i like the use of your words :) "echo off the walls
    expressions withheld abandoned to wither
    ideas left unspoken"
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good for such a short poem you got you point across again. you seem to have a nack to get you point across with short poems.
    well i don't know what else to say hope to hear from you.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]

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