I do agree with infernal_rose, you have facinating nightmares. This is extremely vivid. Very scary. As yet again, it appeals to the depressed suicidal side of me. Overall, I would say this is weel written. My comment is not based on the dream, but how you wrote it. No judgement will be passed. To put it blutly, I liked this. Because it shows you have extreme talent with writing what you see. Making sure the details are in place. It is exquisite.
Interesting words and imagery you have used. You're not familiar with Anton Szandor LaVey by any chance, are you?
This sort of writing isn't my cup of tea, but I do appreciate what you've written here. A Black Mass indeed. This reminds me of my death metal gothic phase back in school. It was fun... at the time. Pretty depressing though, looking back on it. Depressing fun, if there is such a thing lol.
this made me smile...not an easy feat on a Sunday morning. this type of writing reminds me more than a little of the lyrics of a certain english black metal band. something tells me im going to have to back track and read the first nightmare. but this is superbly visual, and whilst we're speaking of visuals it summons the unsettling apocalyptic image of wanton ladies dancing around a grotesque disemboweled christ, a Christian's nightmare of the Black Mass. This seems to celebrate such a scene, but that may just be my reading. If so, this won't be to everyone's taste. the tone doesn't seem to be obvious here despite the fact this is meant to be a nightmare...it seems to be left up to the reader's personal reception. But i commend you for all the interesting and vivid associations you manage to pack into here, the carnival, the litany, the blood raining on the congregation of the pure and heavenly. i wonder how other's will react to this...if this is one of your own, what fascinating nightmares you have...