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    dots Submission Name: Oooooh Pappie. . .dots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1028
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1421



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       I've discovered MIND BLOWING HEART RACING BODY DRIPPING AWESOME PHONE-SEX . . . . . with a really "verbally confident" guy this weekend

    Plz let me no whats the first thing that cums to mind after reading the poem; plz don't hold back on da comments- keep them UNCUT!!


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    dotsOooooh Pappie. . .dots
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    Hey Pappie you got me all worked
    I'm standing up unbuttoning my shirt
    I can't believe you're really so damn good
    just your voice has got me in the mood

    Ooh Pappie your mouth is full of dirt
    now i'm lying down ripping off my shirt
    Starting to picture your fantasy night
    You're so descriptive - your voice is dynamite!

    Wow Pappie don't you dare give it a rest
    I've only just started fondling my breast
    You want my legs up in the air
    Damn Pappie . . . this is more than i can bare!

    Aah Pappie now you're speaking all slow
    Got my hand already moving down below
    Telling me you want to lace me with cream
    Come on lets make this more than a dream!

    Sh*t Pappie don't speak about licking
    now i've got my fingers doing the sticking
    Speak Speak and don't pause SPEAK
    Cause my temperatures rising and i'm reaching my peak

    F*ck Pappie telling me how hard and fast you wana race
    thats just making me increase my pace
    More Pappie
    More
    Don't stop More
    Mo
    o
    o
    o
    o
    o
    o
    ooooh Pappie!

    You just got me cuming like never before




    Submitted on 2005-05-01 11:36:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mmmm, hotness. Phone sex, yum. Okay, you've totally reduced me to monosyllabic nonsense, happy? Never had phone sex but have masturbated while talking to someone on the phone (they didn't know what I was doing, though...makes it kinda exciting). Keep up all this dead sexiness, makes it fun for the rest of us.

    drowning_queen
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by drowning_queen | [ Reply to This ]
      very interesting. damn! this piece is almost like reading one of erotic romantic/drama novels. you know those books where on the cover there is always a half-naked man and woman all hugged up! but anyways you have a lot of potiential and it seems like this is a personal poem. even though this isn't really my style, you kept my interest!
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah,...
    that was nice,
    real nice, look, im only 16 and that was definately some rated-R [censored]. lmao. i've read a few like this in my day, n i've liked em all. i like sex, it sounds fun.~nahlij
    | Posted on 2005-05-31 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      You are crazy! Talk about me being freaky! That was good girl, I liked it a lot. The ending was funny though. Must be nice to enjoy yourself so much! That sounds fun now I might have to try that one day. Well I got more stuff coming I've just been busy So we can enjoy each others freakiness now lol Well ima go read more of your stuff peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]
      Now this was raw and very descriptive. Writing a poem rhyming about phone sex is certainly unique. This was like reading a rhyming r- rated racey article in playboy wow. Cant criticize don't see anything technically wrong the language is a bet raw for my taste but you can't please everybody. `always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... very descriptive. very... uh, intense. hmm, what's this dude's number?? nah just kidding. this was... i don't even know, all i know is where can i find one?! can't really give you any comments here... bout to flip through the yellow pages...
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was explicit...although Pappie...is actually spelled Papi...

    You really went into detail and got the whole erotic thing going on. I like the more clean erotic poems but you have your own style and I commend you for that. I can say that your style may be a little too raw and overboard at times. The key to success is to write in a form that you will attract more people. Your reactions and comments may grow if you cleaned up a little bit.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't really know what to say, this is very hot! It must be good, cos you had me reading it with YOUR voice, and it all seemed to feel right as I read along with your ever-increasing excitement.
    Can't really criticize anything, just give us all his number!
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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