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    dots Submission Name: The Missing Piecedots

    Author: DarkPoeticSoul
    ASL Info:    18/m/NY
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 4/14/5
    Words: 376
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Missing Piecedots

    T'is three years since we last spoke,
    There has not been a single day since that i have awoken
    And not thought of you.
    You and I were best of friends,
    As we always though we would be untill the very end.
    But we graduated and continued or lives,
    The bond that joined us shriveled and died.
    As my life went on i though mostly of you,
    But shyness plagued me through and through.
    I could have called you on the phone,
    But instead i sat here all alone.
    I wondered what was wrong with me,
    Why I never felt true joy and glee.
    I felt as if darkness was all around,
    Slowly feeding on my love for you that has no bounds. In this task the darkness failed,
    But it did something else instead.
    It took the little happines and joy in my life,
    And drained it from me with great delight.
    I grew colder and colder my heart turned to ice, The ridiclue of my peers tighted like a vice.
    As love was lost it was duely replaced,
    Where once was love now only hate.
    Sure I might fake a smile or two,
    But hey wouldnt you?
    If a piece of you was missing one that you could not even realize was gone,
    And you just continued to hate as if nothing was wrong.
    Now as I have reunited with you i have had a revalation,
    One or mabey two,
    That you were that piece of my life that i had lost,
    And that you are worth anything no mater the cost.
    Now that I know this i wish I could tell thee,
    But you wouldnt understand the impact you had on me.
    And so you cannot know the truth,
    Of how it makes me feel to hear your name,
    And see how you have changed.
    I know now that you will always be in my heart, Waiting there to protect me from the dark.
    And my dearest I pray thee be enternally well.

    Submitted on 2005-05-01 14:55:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well.. Well.. well.., You are an awesome poet!I say so!Your Poem is so full of emotion and expression it makes my emotions feel your pain.But you really should call or do somthin' with that person."But hey wouldnt you?" Also was a great catch line.. You can tell You have people reading your poetry.You are truly an amazing poet!~
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      Thia was good it seems like you miss this persom and you regret not talking to the person.The only thing wrong is in the
    3rd and fourth senteces the spelling with the y up in the 3rd sentence while it should be in the forth one.other than that it was good. hope to hear from you.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good, I liked the way you made it flow and the last line really spoke to me. I hope you keep this up and I get to read more from you soon.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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