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    dots Submission Name: The Dragons Hold The Worldsdots
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    Author: Gravitic
    ASL Info:    20/m/tn
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 28/30/8
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this as an assignment in English last year...it's one of my favorites...let me know what you think about it...any input would be appreciated...I'm really trying to improve on my poetry...thnaks


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    dotsThe Dragons Hold The Worldsdots
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    Outside the worlds and outside creation,
    In a place that exists only by intimation,
    A great dragon, lord of time and of time's pause,
    Holds a bright chain of worlds in his crystal claws.
    The dragons hold the worlds.

    The worlds bump and click with a soft sliding sound
    On the silver links of the chain that binds them round.
    Those chains are bent galaxies, the depths of starry space,
    All of them less than one scale of the dragon in this far place.
    The dragons hold the worlds.

    He breathes fire softly as he lowers his magnificent head,
    And that flame moves like a stately tiger through the light thread
    That binds the worlds, sucking heat away from some of them,
    And turning the world that the bauble represents into a lifeless gem.
    The dragons hold the worlds.

    But other worlds perish in the heat of the intense flame,
    And never know the reason for their destruction or its true name.
    It is only some that at any time warm to the heat as to summer sun,
    And in them then life and art, magic and highest radiance, like water run.
    The dragons hold the worlds.

    In that far place that exists outside of the worlds and creation
    Sits on his haunches a wondrous beast wrought of pure imagination.
    And as he gazes at the worlds, how can we know that he exists?
    Or is never really knowing the answer the mystery at the heart of it?
    The dragons hold the worlds.




    Submitted on 2005-05-01 15:08:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      intresting. the idea is magnificent. i like how u symbolize the dragons to god. (or thats how i understood it) the rhyming is perfect and ur wording fell into place so well.
    great work
    -sun justin
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Sun | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very good piece! I love the rhyming and the flow. the dragons holding the worlds is a great way of putting it! keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by randomness85 | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to say that this is one of the better poems i have read
    it seems that you have captured sprit of the piece
    i don't think that there is any thing that i would change about this one can't wait to see if your other pieces are as good
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by DonKB | [ Reply to This ]
      AWSOME! My new fave! Your words were perfectly put together and your description of the dragon was excellent. I don't see any need for improvement on this one. I like it the way it is! Keep at it! You'll get better as time goes on.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by WindEmpress | [ Reply to This ]


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