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    dots Submission Name: Teen Lovedots

    Author: Krinchinian
    ASL Info:    20/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164/231/84
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsTeen Lovedots

    As lightning strikes across the sky,
    I sit inside and wonder why,
    Why you and i fell apart,
    And in the process hurt my heart.

    Why does teen love hurt so mch,
    Like when you and i fell out of touch,
    The pain was so much i sad down and cried,
    I wanted to die, you always lied.

    Nothing you was was believable,
    Your love was no longer retrievable,
    Now its as if you never existed,
    When it came to us you always resisted.

    Maybe we just weren't meant to be,
    Your unhappy, which i can't bear to see,
    Over time we just seemed to fall apart,
    As if we were hit by cupids poison dart,

    So im just gonna let you go,
    Maybe next time we'll go a little slow,
    And not rush into a relationship,
    I say my goodbye with one last kiss of the lip.

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