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    dots Submission Name: Pain and Miserydots

    Author: DonKB
    ASL Info:    34/m/goergia
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 19/17/11
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Pain and Misery

    As I lie in bed and dream of things I cannot see, I wonder why I still believe that I belong to thee….
    All I have to do is believe, and all will be right within me, but in fact the lies that are spoken only lead to truths that are broken….
    If I believe then why not remove this pain and misery, instead I live with loneliness that haunts and plays with me….
    And these visions that I see only lead to disillusions of plaques that reside in me. And if the Devil is to blame for all this pain and misery, then teach him a lesson and lead him into desolation. But if it’s left up to me I’ll end this life and all will be right, even in the site of thee. For if I’m the cause of this pain and misery, I’d rather be out of the site of thee. If there are truths unspoken then let them woken, for the entire world to see. For this world was not made to be - in pain and misery.

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      This is a really good write! Lots of depth and emotions! You express yourself well with your words. This poem speaks of lonliness and sadness. Almost sounds like suffering. I hope if this is about you, that things have gotten better. These kinds of feelings really suck, I know. You deserve to find happiness in this life, even in small amounts! Anyway, I think this is very well done! Good write! Take care!
    | Posted on 2005-07-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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