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    dots Submission Name: All arounddots

    Author: Rail
    ASL Info:    18-m-Washinton state
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 117/80/13
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Just something else I wrote when I was bored I'll probly add more to it latter.

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    dotsAll arounddots

    All around there is no light.
    It is the dead of night.
    and I'm in quite a plite.

    The people run in fright.
    It's with grate spite.
    That I fight those who kill with such delight.

    Submitted on 2005-05-01 17:15:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good. I like the fact that it is short yet is makes you think. The only thing i would think about changing are some of the rhymes. But other than that once again well done.

    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting... and you know how much i like interesting things . its realy tiny but i'm sure you'll find something elce to say. though it is a bit confusing. if pplz are running in fright and you are seeking out murderers or something then why are you in a plite? ack! oh and you spelled great like a cheese grater and if they are killing ppl with cheese grater they ARE messed up. lol.
    *toodles off to get cookies*
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good begining but you do need to add more to it than it should be grea if you keep up the good work. hope to hear from you.
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      yah u need to add more but its a good beginning it could turn into a poem with a story in it
    Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was really good. The whole thing flowed really well together. The only thing that confused me was the 2 to last line, maybe it's just becuse I'm really tired but I didn't make any sense out of it. Other then that, keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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