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    dots Submission Name: o dovedots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 518
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    Bytes: 594



    Description:
       this has more than one meaning for me, so im putting this in misc.


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    dotso dovedots
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    O dove, where did you go?
    With wings wounded,
    white feathers bloodied.
    o dove, where did you go?

    My dove, where did you go?
    Flown away after sunset
    deserted your nest
    my dove, where did you go?

    Sweet dove, where did you go?
    Perch on my window
    I need to have you near me
    sweet dove, where did you go?

    Dear dove, where did you go?
    Loving shield you took with you
    forsaken me vulnerable
    dear dove, where did you go?

    The vulture has taken your place.




    Submitted on 2005-05-01 20:11:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Peace is lost amd depression has taken over. That's what I get from this write. The dove being peace.. the vulture, depression/darkness.
    Clever usuage of the two (even if I'm not correct in the meaning). The repetition needs to be lessened. But this is good. I like it. Nice work.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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