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    dots Submission Name: Vampiredots

    Author: DonKB
    ASL Info:    34/m/goergia
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 19/17/11
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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       i was watching Queen of the damned when i wrote this please take it easy

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    You hear the call
    Of whispers of the fall
    From which I hail
    This face so pail
    You can hear me hark
    From within the dark
    Of all my desolations
    Upon my violations
    Of which I speak
    This life so bleak
    That fill your years
    With rampaged tears
    Like a steady stream
    With in your dreams
    A rushing flood
    Of the scent of blood
    Iíll find no surprises
    As your heartbeat rises
    And the numbing pain
    Of you pin pricked vein
    The fleeting breathe
    Upon your death

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