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    dots Submission Name: On the Stagedots
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    Author: Kat Feline
    ASL Info:    15/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    2.53 - 9/9/3
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 629
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       This is my description of being on stage while dancing. The thrill, the fullfillment, and the fun of dancing.


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    dotsOn the Stagedots
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    Waiting patiently,
    behind the crimson curtains.
    Then I hear my cue.

    I walk with style,
    my shoes making different sounds.
    Drums, making music.

    I feel the music,
    pulsing through my veins and head.
    It swallows me whole.

    The song is fading
    slowly away, my heart is
    thumping in my chest.

    I turn to the aud-
    ience. Smiling, I take my
    bow. My feet are done.

    Turning, I exit.
    Another performance done.
    Can't wait for the next.




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      When I read this, it really makes me remember heading out on the stage and performing. I thought that image was very clear and vivid in your poem. One thing though, I think you ended it off too abruptly. I would change the ending. But I really like the poem because it brings back the butterfly feeling in my stomach.
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by emanol | [ Reply to This ]
      a little choppy- the rhythm is sort of off at times because in a couple of lines it has 4 or 6 syllables, instead of 5 or 7. But I like the way you make the reader feel like they're up on the stage with you- for the first couple of stanzas, at least. But for the last four verses, you kind of threw me off there- somehow the second part doesnt exactly match with the first half.

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    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Toxic Rose | [ Reply to This ]


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