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    dots Submission Name: American Soldierdots
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    Author: Silencer
    ASL Info:    25/m/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 52/66/29
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
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    Description:
        A little pride for the red white and blue from a first person perspective.


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    dotsAmerican Soldierdots
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    I am a child of the world. I am as wild as the wind yet docile as the night time breeze in the spring. My devotion radiates outwards like the fire in my heart burns with a ferocity to succeed. Such a passion for life and a love for all it holds is so precious, yet people are called upon to preserve, protect and ultimately destroy a product of beauty for the betterment of a majority. Like the hands of a surgeon delicately removing cancer the ones who would do wrong are weeded from our society. A soldier may seem to be an invader sent as a death machine, but a terrorist is a but a vile infestation in which should meet its destruction. A desert for a landscape with buildings at some distance is no happy place to be. But I am the laser in which the surgeon manipulates so carefully. The enemy may last see flames of fouldering heat. I am an American Soldier, constantly vigilant, always on my feet.




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    ||| Comments |||
            Ahem. It's nice written and has very hard undertones. I'm going to leave it at that, since I completely disagree with the message it sends. I can tell you it sends it well, though. Just not my cup-o-tea; but since I don't like viewing and not commenting, I'll tell you that it's got some nice wordings. Erm. Yeah.
           Anyway, don't take it the wrong way. Different opinions and what-not.

    ~ Manu.
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by Seiraryu | [ Reply to This ]


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