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    dots Submission Name: The Sacred Hoopdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 555
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 285



    Description:
       I was gone most of the weekend: part work & part fun (scenic drive!) & "i" find myself inspired by my whole environment & then I read this by Emerson on The Transcendentalist:
    "He outght to be a shower of benefits ~ a great influence which should never let his brother go, but should refresh old merits continually with new ones; so that, though absent, he should never be out of mind, his name never far from my lips; but if the earth should open at my side or my last hour were to come, His name should be the prayer I should utter to the Universe>"

    How freaken spiritual on so many levels!
    To all the Elitistz who so courageously are the rains tjat spill the wordz that make their contributions as Emerson so eloquently shared above. God Bless!!

    Love, Peace, Joy!!! Epiphany ; > }


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    dotsThe Sacred Hoopdots
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    tHE Cloudz
    filled
    with the waters
    of a foreign lake...
    H20'z
    through rain
    spilled
    on foreign lands
    Mother Nature'z
    Goddess Hand
    a ring
    in the
    O
    of LIFE ; > {}




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      Now this one's a little scientiffanic don't ya say?

    H2O'z lol.

    It's intresting how you phrase a scientific term with natrue such as in the stanza bellow.
    of a foreign lake...
    H20'z
    through rain

    then mix it with a little magic/mystasicim.

    Mother Nature'z
    Goddess Hand

    the phrases flow smothly and transition well.
    you never cease to amaze me my friend.

    Keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
      Now you got me singing Hakuna Mattata from Lion King :P :P :P The Circle of Life...DOH!...That's alright. Nice poem, nice style :)...Traveling water, that's deep...You never really stop and think where the water that hits your head has been...Now you've got me thinking too...ACK! :)

    Thanks for the good reaD

    StW
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      What goes around comes around in the circle of life. I always have to read yours a few times to get a meaning...but that's what I like about them. It's like looking at an art painting, studying it's many angles..and drawing your own meaning from it. The fact that you can create a poem/write in that way shows you have talent.
    Nice work!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Not sure what that last thingy is, but another fine piece of work. Short but it makes you stop and think. Nice job.

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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