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    dots Submission Name: Mon Vampirous Douxdots
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    Author: ACircuitShock
    ASL Info:    18/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 221/243/40
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 361
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1604



    Description:
       Well, the title means My Sweet Vampirous. I just wanted to use a metaphor that kind of alludes to a Vampire and some people who act like them. Not that this is based of any recent experience, but we all know those people that love to suck the life out of you.

    Anyway, tell me what you think!


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    dotsMon Vampirous Douxdots
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    Suspended, motionless,
    The gasp before the fall.

    A frozen, crimson droplet
    Condensing in silence;
    Preparing to leave it's subtle stain
    Upon a carrion colored floor.

    A shining, dripping ruby;
    It collects the light from your eyes,
    Reflects it back to me
    In morbidly drawn paintstrokes;
    Jagged, murderous lines,
    Glowing a beauty that the dead
    Would surely give their life for.

    Alabaster skin
    Gives way to alabaster sin.
    So pure, white, and effervescent;
    This unholy beauty.

    A creation unsanctioned
    By the gods of men,
    A creature untouched
    By these mortal fears,
    Unscathed by the burning ignorance of daylight.
    Reawakened and nourished,
    To feed and be fed upon
    By the cool knowledge of the twilight.

    Glorious, yes,
    But damned just as gloriously

    To pierce,
    To fool,
    The wicked and the asinine,
    Such are an angels prey.

    To love,
    To know,
    This demon tosses humanity to the winds
    In exchange for so much more.

    So, my sweet vampirous,
    Must your incision take it's course?
    When this body is dry,
    Turning slowly to dust,
    Will your love mean anything more
    Than this shell left lying on the floor?
    We shall see....

    The crimson is falling, tentative,
    Reaching out towards gravity
    And it's inexorable pull to dust.




    Submitted on 2005-05-02 18:24:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yes, it's true i was a bit intimidated by the french titles. only because i don't know what they mean. i really enjoy your work because, even if they're long it still manages to hold my interest.(not an easy task i asure you). i honestly can't pick a favorite part, it all flows very nicely.
    | Posted on 2005-08-09 00:00:00 | by shootingstar | [ Reply to This ]
      You know you just happened to write about one of my favorite subjects? Your poem does vampires full justice and actually takes a train of thought which I had never considered before. Seriously, your prose is beautiful. Thats the plain and simple truth. Most long poems feel long but yours doesn't. Its fresh, orginal, and thought provoking. Furthermore, it is phrased like a true poet. I will definately be reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by Mimevas Lemqi | [ Reply to This ]



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