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    dots Submission Name: Princessdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 414
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    Description:
       Played hooky yesterday & lounged by the river all day. Back to the office today but my heart's not in work.....I'm a princess this week!

    They just smile at me at work & wonder where do I get this imagination?

    Smile! Have fun! Don't pretend ~ just BE ~ whatever u want 2!

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!


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    dotsPrincessdots
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    Look @ these shoes
    tied up with a
    pink bow

    I'm a modern-day
    princess don't
    you know

    Bangles and bracelets
    adorn
    my arm

    Sure they're cheap
    that's all part of
    my charm

    Long flowing skirt
    blue as
    the sky

    Can someone bring
    me wings
    I'd like to fly

    I'm a modern-day
    princess
    with nothing to do

    I better tell the
    others
    they haven't a clue.....




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      LOL! Merry meet Epiphany! Oh my God. My 6 year old daughter would sooooooo love this poem. We call her Princess all the time. It described her to a T. I like the poem because of the whimsy in it. I could see you or my daughter laying there asking someone to fetch her her momentary desire. All with a sweet smile and a little wave of the hand. Great Job writing this. I have to put it on my favorites list to share with my daughter later ok? Blessed Be Andrea
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
      Let them eat cake! Wow, how talented! You get to live the dream of every 8 year old girl :P Both a princess AND a ballerina! How about that! I think you need to do an autograph session, or at least produce a cheezy animated disney knockoff! You could rake in the dough! But then again, you DID play hooky and what kind of example are you setting? <shakes head> Well, I guess if you leave the hooky part out you can still rake in the millions :P

    Nice read :)

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    W!
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. It is a bit rudimentary but it is suppose to be spoken for a spoiled princesses point of view and I suppose you wouldn't expect it to be laced in highly stylized writing. This is cute, I'm not sure if it is the best written peice I've ever read but it is a good idea and remember, "the key to having a good idea is to have lots of ideas". Keep it up, keep writing and keep thinking.
    PEACE.
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really catchy, and as Em said "delightful". There's beauty in every woman...and in some ways we're all a princess, I guess you might say. I like the moral I got from this. To just be yourself, even if you have to stand out from the crowd.
    Nice write!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your words freshen up this concept, which has been so traditionally, dark and cold.
    I'm a mordern day pricess
    Classic, and beloved
    Don't stop my friend, your works are harmonic
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      I've got to say, cute. Some girls get to feeling so down on themselves that they don't remember...every little girl is a princess in their own way, as cheesey as it sounds. I like the last stanza...as all the others, it's simple, but it gets across the message...which to be honest, I'm not completely sure of. When I read this, a book instantly popped into my head called "Stargirl" and I also thought of "The Little Princess" two of my alltime favorite stories. Sometimes it's great to get lost in things like that... thanks for the thoughts your poem brought up. Peace

    -LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      Dear me, what a very well hidden message. Tiff, this is lovely and simple, I just adore it.
    The last lines give the plot away, though, and makes the princess actually sad inside her make-believe fairy world.
    Lucky it's not about YOU. Very nicely done.

    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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