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    dots Submission Name: Perfection is a Flawdots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       Hiya. Just went through some old poems of mind and decided I've post this one. It's only a year old.


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    dotsPerfection is a Flawdots
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    I wish that I was perfect,
    my reflection I would see,
    the perfect waist and legs,
    but that is just not me.

    I wish that I was perfect,
    recieve a gift of faith,
    the perfect smile upon my face,
    but that gift is coming late.

    I wish that I was perfect,
    high cheek bones and deep set eyes,
    laying out in the warm sun,
    but I am seeking through the lies.

    I wish that I was perfect,
    no scars visible for you to see,
    one day they'll leave my wrists,
    but this will still be me.

    I wish that I was perfect,
    in every single way,
    so I could be that happy,
    no matter what they say.





    Submitted on 2005-05-03 17:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      who's to say you aren't perfect. you can't let perceptions of perfection affect your view of yourself. god made you, that makes you gorgeous. you are in existance, that makes you perfect. scars or no scars, it just means you haven't seen your beauty, YET. don't give up, after all there are no shadows on the sun; personal perfection is all you need to fulfill. stay adorable, and if i've offended you in any way, please forgive me.~P.J.
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love every word of this and I love the title. I especially like:

    "I wish that I was perfect,
    no scars visible for you to see,
    one day they'll leave my wrists,
    but this will still be me"

    I know exactly what you mean. Another great job :-)

    *nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww. It's really a nice poem. I felt it flowed nicely and gave the air of a very innocent young girl who just had one wish...to be 'perfect' just so the troubles she was plauged with would just...leave...but don't we all feel like that, at least sometimes? The fourth stanza was a good one I think. Although you might not see the scars...they are there...every time it hits the wrist it hits the heart and hearts don't always heal...

    -LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great piece! So true for many I think. This is definately a big struggle for me as well. But what Aknahlij_d 1 said is very true. God made you and in him you are beautiful. To him you are perfection. He smiles when he looks at you. He glows with love for you. That is one thing I'm struggling to believe myself, that he loves me no matter the scares I have as well. But it's true. This poem was good. I personally like poems that are set up like this. You did a great job.

    -Caitlin
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]


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