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    dots Submission Name: A Cyanide Thorn Upon my Breastdots
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    Author: etheariac
    ASL Info:    17/f/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 75/91/36
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 242
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    Description:
       This was inspired by the book all quiet on the western front, but i applied it more to today's war. This is just the final scene inthe life of a military man, destroyed by a war like our own.


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    dotsA Cyanide Thorn Upon my Breastdots
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    My atonement was sent here
    in a plastic encased blast of chards,
    sent from a faceless enemy...
    it smacked me cast backwards,
    and my light
    at the end
    of the tunnel
    was nuclear chaos.
    It rained down ash
    (from where we came and where we now return to)
    it burns acidic
    and poisonous like
    a bud from a cyanide rose,
    that crept past the door stealthfully
    and stinging my flesh in these forms,
    thorns of retribution rip me in two for nothing,
    in this battle land fit for no one but the chiefest of sinners.

    Why, I, a man of 23 years old
    lay dying here in this torn and chewed soil?
    the question strips reason from my lips,
    pressed pale against this foreign blood soaked land,
    as i lay dying for a country i still love.

    Forever in this sacrifice i sink beneath the earth,
    breathing in the toxic perfume of mom's best nuclear bomb.




    Submitted on 2005-05-03 22:46:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. this was awesome. i love history and what not, and u did really good. i hate sad wars and u did such a good job. a perspective of a 23 yr old man coming from a 15yr old girl. sheesh u are good. lol. hope to hear more like this, it intrigued me. good job
    ~cat~
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]



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