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    dots Submission Name: For All The Bitches I Loved Beforedots

    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Riddle/Serious
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       whoa, I wouldn't really, I don't even really trully feel this way. I just seem to be stuck on this FUCK LOVE THING and I'm going with it. Soi no more comments about oh I'm sorry you feel this way but you'll see it will work out and the right girl will come along and all that nonsense will be forgotten,(yeah right) (bring it on)

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFor All The Bitches I Loved Beforedots

    This girl wants to be the apple of my eye.
    Doesnít she know me,
    Iím definitely not that kind of guy.
    So with my deliberately sly
    but sexy style...
      I grab her
       and stab her about 86 times
    with my metallic love
    over and over
    and over again
    for all the girls Iíve loved before,
        and all the girls Iíll never love again

    thanks I feel better

    Julio Lamemanstermsia©

    Submitted on 2005-05-04 03:20:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      " So with my deliberately sly
    but sexy style...
    I grab her
    and stab her about 86 times "

    i like how that came to be. i wasnt expecting such an angry line from reading the first couple ones. keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      I would like to give a thanks to Ray...for fcking me over...a thanks to Luke...for fcking me over...a thanks to Jerry...for fcking me over...a thanks to Avery...for fcking me over!


    Sorry...I got into it...just relieving some inner aggressions here...that's all!

    I feel you though. you get involved...then get hurt...then try to hold on...then get hurt even more...LOVE IS A BYTCH!

    But...one day...maybe...I'll go to an Opera and meet the perfect man! LMFAO

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      You are a nutcase and i love what i read of u so far!

    I would have never thought, after reading this, to tell u that all will be all right.

    I am commenting this and I have a terrible headache. Yet I want to comment.

    This piece is damn crazy! I mean:
    "and stab her
    about 86 times
    with my metallic love "

    just WOW!

    I love the "metallic love" thing sounds cold and bitter although it is love. Like a sour after taste of love.
    I wonder y 86 times though! maybe it does not have a special meaning, yet i think it does.

    I like the way you make the font smaller in the end as if starting with a normal tone of voice then getting on with a whisper, as to let us in the secret of the way u love and the way u will never love again.

    The "thanks I feel better" in the end has this sexual underlying meaning, IMHO, that completes the "metallic love" thing. sort of I got my way with u all.

    It brings to my mind the serial killers who love their victims, in some way, they catch their "prey" with their unusual style, a bit like the spiders attracting their prey to the web, to meet their doom. Or maybe we have here more of male black widow, attracting its mate, have its way with it and then killing it.

    I think m talking nonsense! or maybe not, my head hurts too much.

    Anyhow, brought a smile to my face and made my eyes pop out at the same time.
    That is a rare reaction from me, soconsider it an utmost compliment.

    | Posted on 2005-07-14 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
    dammit I love this!
    right on, f uck love. its an overexhausted and overestimated clichť.
    this sure gave me a wonderful relief after reading a lot of lovesick poems. I think we've all felt this way.
    86 times! ahahah...
    (thanks I feel better)-that rocks!
    love this. definite fave.
    thanks for the read!

    p.s. i think metalic is spelt metallic. whatever.
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      please don't hurt me mikey....
    please....just wanna know you...
    and maybe later i'll blow you....
    please mikey... please......No.


    So liked this.....funny with that sense of reality which makes it just a little disturbing...
    I think you should take the ( out) !! and just put a question mark after why.
    and i stab her....about 86 times.

    also i think at the end..instead of the
    (thanks i feel better) or in addition to it

    so you still wanna give me a try...
    or do you still think i'm your guy..
    i dunno.
    for some reason that 'I' sound is sticking with me although i don't think that woud rhyme.
    what i'm saying is a little phrase to bring you back to the begining of the poem....know what i mean ?
    anyway...i love it the way it is....i just saw the ( ) and had to mention that.
    even though your a depraved sociopath....
    your still hot....

    luv ya dork
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by C. Starr | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I geuss I'll scrath your name off the list of possible future axe muderers.. (psych) lol. I understand exactly what you were saying here, even in my young age I can agree with your newest philosophy on love but I still have hope. My dad didn't start going bald until he was 37 so as long as I find her before then I am set, cause I will be one ugly bald dude... haha.
    Take Care,
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting... A little strange, but whatever.

    I'm just commenting on random poems so i can post one of mine, so yeah...
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by RealityTears | [ Reply to This ]
      /do you know how many times I have threatened to castrate any guy thing on the face of this planet??? I totally understand. But, the world should definately move towards selective breeding. Some people just aren't ment to reproduce. Just don't literally act on these thoughts dude, you never know what could happen tomorrow...
    P.S. Sorry for saying that last part, but it's kind of heard to meet decent people when you're stuck in jail. And the last time I checked, they didn't let you have weekly meetings with girls from the female jail.
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      hee hee hee heee...not every encounter has to be kismet right? sometimes you just crave the bestial quality of sex- using someone for your own pleasure, even out of anger. We all crave it. Even those who say they don't. "even saints need to sin sometimes" ( I just quoted myself, do I still have to put it in quotations?) We are all animals when you get down to it. Mags
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      That's creepy, but it made me kinda laugh with the whole Julio Iglesias thing with a very angry bent to it.

    "So with my deliberately sly
    but sexy style.." I like that line...very telling.

    Have a good one,
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]
      you know what...this one might be one of my favorites from you...i really really like the part where ya stab her 86 times. i think the length is perfect for this type of poem...i mean really, how many lines does it take to say I'm Gonna Take My Love Misfortunes Out On This Dumb B!tch lol
    i'm not gonna tell ya youre gonna find that special person one day, because lets face it, there are times ya wanna stab them about 86 times too...it doesnt get much better.
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
      my heart goes out to you...if only one day you could meet that special someone who could make you understand...

    naw ok, im joking, because after all, what would happen if LameMan Terms started writing love poetry? I mean soppy stuff, would that not mean something along the lines of the end of the world, or perhaps a reversal of all the things we take as stable...another poem with your unique mark on it. bit shorter than the usual...

    but honestly..you'll find her one day ;)

    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]
      where do you get this stuff...hehe...it makes me laugh and wonder if you check yourself out in the mirror all the time...jk...lol...i like and stab her with my metallic love part...oh and i see your description...you didnt write that cause my comment did ya...lol...well ...um err...purps
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
    this reads like a rude boy rap freestyle you might hear at a club night.
    do you wear baggy jeans and roll one of the legs up and pull up your sock?
    and walk with a limp?
    are you a pimp?
    are you bling?
    do you have a ring that covers all of your knuckles?
    and a number plate saying b16 boy?
    do you have 20" chrome rims?
    and leopard fur seat covers?
    does your suspension jump up and down?

    this is funny in parts and obv. what you are becoming know for.

    and that is that.
    take care
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]
            It's [censored] vicious. Heh. I like it. It's got spunk. The entire thing is truly a very nice: Screw Love type thing. I felt this way not too long ago, and you'll get over it (kidding, kidding!).
           Nothing really I can say. You've got it down pat, dude. Heh.
           Nice work.

    ~ Manu.
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Seiraryu | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol, now instead of classifying this as a serious poem you should classify it as a love poem just for effect :P And no, I'm not going to give you a comment on how it's all gonna be alright blahblahblah :)...I read your journal, and that's funny...I think that's gonna be my next poem "Ode To The Comment Rapers" For those who only read cuz they have to and can't even think of anything original to write :P

    nice job on this :)

    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, so now I'm REALLY concerned about the way we were introduced!!!! lol! I know this is where the women of the site are supposed to pat you on the back , apologize for what someone else has done to you and reassure you that woman aren't all that way....

    Nope, can't do it.

    I loved the rawness in this. I guaran-damn-tee that if a man used this this way of saying "leave me alone" that it would be effective. Maybe a bit too effective.

    I liked the way you used rhyme in the beginning and then kinda broke away the rules and just wrote what came to you. It showed you trying to keep control, trying to keep it together, trying to be O.K., and then, "WHOOPS, was that my out loud voice!!" It's a form that Robin Williams- the Master- has perfected in comedy, and it works great here too.

    Good to know we are ok.... cause I'm not ready for that big dirt nap yet!

    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa, anger. And 86 stabbings! A refreshing piece. I have to admit, I read it because of the title, but I'll reading more of yours because of the madness. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing - Lazy Spleen
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by Lazy Spleen | [ Reply to This ]

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