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Author:	Forgiven
ASL Info:	27/F/Fl
Elite Ratio:	4.08 - 305/260/57
Words:	175

Class/Type:	Poetry/Passion
Total Views:	226
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1050

Description:
I want to see if the meaning is found.

Check the meaning dots

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Have you already decided,
what to look for while your here?
Will it be the words you pick on?
or maybe
you will pick though the meaning this time.
So difficult to understand what I say,
when all that you find
are misspelled words
Have you never made a mistake?
As you feel the words coming
and you write them as if in a trance?
I am pushed under
by the pompous behavior by others,
I am not here for a grammar lesson
Nor do I need you to tell me where I failed.
I look on to you as family,
someone to let me know if they understand.
Someone to see the truth in the words,
as they read.
Please do not take this harshly,
I've never meant it so.
But I'm sure when you've finished yours
you will look to the end of the verses
and wonder who has felt it as well as yourself
And if they were to say
those words are spelt wrong
They have missed it all.

Submitted on 2005-05-04 08:46:15 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm in love w/ this poem. The truth has spoken. I haven't been on here that long but I understand you clearly. I'm not so much into critique because I am in love with poetry. It's like being in love with someone. Their flaws don't matter its what's inside. Keep writing and living~1
| Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by InnerEnergy | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm fairly guilty of the sin you write about, but only because I know that errors and typos distract the reader, and can undermine the meaning you put into a poem. I guess it depends on what you want. If you want to get your message across, or if you want to write good poetry, Good poetry doesn't have spelling mistakes. And, we "pompous" ones are not trying to point out your failings, we're trying to help, and encourage. If we thought it was crap we wouldn't even bother.
Now this poem is very very good, and I have nothing but praise for the way you have written it, and you can tell from the comments you've received, that it's good. Maybe you've hit a nerve with a lot of people, I don't know, but poetry-wise, it was excellent, and not one mistake LOL
Be Happy
Graeme
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  interesting...posting a poem on a critique site that says basically "i don't want you to critique my poetry"...very interesting. i understand what you're saying...that it's most important for people to get to the heart of your words and what the poem is about...but those other things you mentioned (grammar, spelling, etc) are important. think of a ferrari...it's the whole of the car that makes it so valuable (the engine, the body style, the interior), but if your ferrari is covered in bird crap and the inside has food crumbs everwhere then it's not quite as impressive...and people will notice the crap and the mess even though it's a ferrari! so, you may write a poem with the heart of a "ferrari", but make sure you wash off the bird crap and clean out the crumbs so that people can appreciate it completely.
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  I think I got the message that the essence of the poem is what is most important not spelling or other writing format rules and that reader's on sites as these tend to forget most I truly believe trying to give constructive critique. Constructive critque in itself is an art lol...how do you tell someone that something they might have spent weeks on that the poem just isn't working? Very difficult. But this poem is working evoking and in my case reminding why I read poetry...the love of human feelings/emotion uniquely exposed for me the reader to experience...thanks for this insightful poem. `and always write poetry, Cheryl.
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
  I understand, least I would like to think I do. People, when they read works with alot of emotion, they see only misspelled words and phrases that dont belong...they dont understand what kind of torment you were in when you wrote it. I like poems like that, were the emotion is evident and things are misspelled...shows how much of a rush the person was in to get their feelings out, ya know? Well...was I close?

->Dark
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
  I feel your disappointment in this poem. Obviously you have been hurt by people not grasping the emotions and heart you have put into your work, instead they point out misspellings and grammatical errors. Let me say that when it is difficult to 'get' what someone has written it is easy to point out those kind of errors. I'm not sure what to say because I have done that very thing. One really should do all they can to present their work as best they can but readers should also recognize the worth of that poem and the positive parts of it if they are going to take the time to critique it. Keep your head up! Dan
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]

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