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Exit Exit Exit


Author: the apocrypha
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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First writing in two months or so.


Exit Exit Exit



Oh you're into submission
Oh you're in a position
Where compromise
Is not an option

Oh but in your eyes
I can read thousands of lies

A thousand lonely stories
A thousand lonely crimes
Regretted a thousand lonely times




Submitted on 2005-05-04 09:05:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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