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Im sorry


Author: Enleigh
ASL Info:    16/f/WI
Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 21 /32 /13
Words: 162
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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i wrote this poem for an outlet its like talking things out with myself before i do them. it helps me think...Please write whatever feedback ud like.


Im sorry


My life is twisted into this crazy hate
My head is going through the paths of my fate

My mind is confused
But when I make this decision
No matter what I’m going to lose

I try to tell myself not to do it
But my emotions rise above my mind
And before I know it
I’m staring into space
As if I am blind

Suddenly a bead of blood
Crashes to the floor
I feel so scared
I feel so hurt

Then my best friend opens the door

She runs to hold me
My name she screams
Can this really be what it seems?
I want to hug her
And let her see
But my body won’t let me

I try to say I’m sorry
But the words won’t come out

What I’ve done is all so wrong
I can’t come back
Now that I’m gone




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