Description: This is about someone I've confided in for several months and care very much about. I began talking to him through a close friend who moved several miles away over two years ago. He still visits occasionally to see family, so I've been promised a meeting with the subject of this poem on his next trip. I don't expect a lot of people to understand long-distance relationships, and there definitely aren't a lot of good poems written about them, so maybe this puts it into perspective.
30 Seconds of Someday -------------------------------------------
Let me see our first meeting,
your adoring gaze, cautious smile.
Let me bask in the light of your eyes
to keep warm for a while.
Until a magnetic surge overcomes me
and in a second, I'm locked in embrace,
months of solitude erased,
our hearts' victorious pace
represent this aforepromised unity,
described in your words' caress,
a lament until ultimately expressed
in the first ceaceless kiss you commit to me.
Let me succeed to cede to the taste of that kiss,
only now a vignette from miles away.
Let me hide in its bliss until it truly exists
in our long anticipated "someday".
THis touched me because I am feeling many of thiese same feelings right now. Although under different circumstances. It is not a long distance relationship, but someone that I have known for years. I think you should bask in this until you are soaked to the bone. YOu are sixteen and I would give anything to go back and be sixteen again. I still feel sixteen, I just can't act like it (all the time). " Let me succeed to cedede to the taste of that kiss"- I stumbled over this a bit I think you could rework it to read a little smoother with all the "to's". I encourage you to be young for as long as you can- it is a glorious time in your life. My daughter is 10 and is just dying to be older- really the world is full of beauty and romance for you now- immerse yourself in it. This is a beautiful piece. Magnolia
well...i'd have to say i can defently relate to this...and me and a certian someone have written atleast twenty poems about the longing...wanting to be together to meet to touch to kiss but us living so far away from each other...so yeah... i'm defently understanding... feeling sad because i miss him like crazy...and our distance is killing me...and somedays i wonder if hes real or just my mind playing tricks on me...i think this was written quite well and i enjoyed it...purps