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i was wrong


Author: Enleigh
ASL Info:    16/f/WI
Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 21 /32 /13
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /You left me
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Description:

anyfeed back is good...this is about an old bf.


i was wrong


I know we wern't perfect
but I thought we had somthing
You just threw me aside
like...like im nothing

I don't want to try
I wont even cry
I dont want to work it out
or even figure you out

It pisses me off
how you didnt even call
You wont even look at me
as your walking down the hall

I thought we had somthing
but now im sure that I'm nothing




Submitted on 2005-05-05 11:18:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  good job. you make the reader feel everything you are feeling, by drawing them into the poem great work. keep it up hope to see more by you
| Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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