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    dots Submission Name: Rambling, reallydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsRambling, reallydots

    I hold on to pieces of memories that I only know in my dreams
    like I can't forget you really
    you take a part of me rip me at the seams
    like I never existed really

    A blanket to keep you warm
    A hand to turn you on
    A used condom and you throw me away
    what am I to you, really

    I hold on to bits of conversations
    Words that I can't get out of my head
    they can't hurt me really
    but then again it hurts to remember what you said

    A voice to remember the pain
    A tissue to blow your nose
    You never needed me really
    You still kept me around

    I am amazed at my own self control
    it wasn't that hard really
    I let you go

    Submitted on 2005-05-05 11:56:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I did enjoy this poem I have felt the this many times. I could feel emotions from my own past relationship stirring up again.
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Najeaon | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece brought back memories, not so good ones, but it reminded me of how one person can so easily use another, then discard them as if they were garbage. Unfortunately, it happens all the time. You've played a picture for the reader, and at least for me, it was simply put, very 'in your face' , very real. As if it just happened yesterday.

    Nice write, keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      fair. I'd advise thinking outside the box when it comes to composure/structuralization. Seems faint fore importance, but provides a completely different read, for your sake i hope it was at least ribbed, or her sensation
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]

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