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    dots Submission Name: Dangerous Gamedots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1006
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       So much for not getting emotions involved . . . . .


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    dotsDangerous Gamedots
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    I played a dangerous game
    And now I find myself consumed by your burning flame

    I was the sweet girl
    You'd never guess could be the hot girl
    You were the bad boy
    I'd never thought I'd wish to be my boy

    Rules of the game were clearly found
    We were only each others for this round

    I was the sweet girl
    That promised would never fall for you boy
    You were the bad boy
    That said you'd loose interest in me girl

    The game ended and the board packed away
    Last rule: we'd never mention this encounter on any day

    I was the sweet girl
    Whose growing infatuation for you put me in a swirl
    You were the bad boy
    And now I've inevitably fallen for you

    I played a dangerous game
    And now I find myself consumed by your burning flame






    Submitted on 2005-05-05 13:21:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow
    i liked this poem it described a relationships up and downs perfectly
    then to see after you have played the game you realize that you have found love
    i dont consider it a dangerous game as long as you are happy

    thank you for your comments on sunshine im glad you enjoyed it

    Take Care of yourself and treat yourself right

    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I can kind of relate in a way. I know the feeling and I'm sure most people do. But your poem really kind of made me realize it. I like the whole good girl/bad boy thing. God...I HATE infatuation. Especially when whoever your infatuated with doesnt feel the same way about you. ...I suppose these things happen. But anywho, I really enjoyed reading this. Great job :-)

    *nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      this was kind of sing songy, so that was a definite plus. i liked the repitition as well, and i can honestly say, i've found myself in that position before. so, yeah, this was nice, i wonder if you put music to it... anyway, ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~TaY~
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      I kinda liked it and found myself humming a mental tune and singing along towards the end. It is a little repetitive, but thats how music is and everything can be a song. But thats just me...I tend to think in rhyme and rhythm most of the times because its easier to remember things.
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay I'm feeling the whole good girl/bad boy vision but the whole repetition just made me think of a card from Mr. Deeds...it just made this honest emotion (that I'm sure some readers can relate to) seem... well, phony.

    I feel you have a good thing here that you are trying to express but this just needs some refinishing to make it a more enjoyable read that will earn you more comments.
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]


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