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    dots Submission Name: Almost lost a frienddots
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    Author: dancer06
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 232/171/44
    Words: 388
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       My best friend got in a wreck. almost lost her. glad she's here. this is to her.... love you babe


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    Driving alone in the morning.
    Her car went off the road.
    Rolling down with no prayer on a wing.
    The mind blanked in overload.

    I almost lost one so dear to me.
    All little things forgot.
    After that it was so plain to see,
    all the things to me she taught.

    A feeling of lose when she wasn't really gone.
    Just under the odds of bad situation.
    No pro's to this, just one big con.
    I was weighted down in water by a ton.

    What was I to do or say?
    Her hair was missing from surgery.
    She couldn't even look at herself in dismay.
    Actually with swollen eyes she could barely see me.

    She broke her neck and arm and jaw.
    She had a blood clot and couldn't walk.
    They tried to get her for breaking the law!
    She tried to, but she couldn't even talk.

    Waiting for her seemed like years
    As we sat in the waiting room.
    As I saw her mom I burst into tears.
    I tried to be strong but all I felt was doom.

    I just wanted to see her face!
    And now the doctors keeping us from her.
    All I could do in that dark room was pace.
    Felt like suffocating in mounds of fur.

    The warmth of the fur was mine to touch.
    But no warmth could be found in me.
    I know my love for her couldn't amount to much
    Against the love of her family.

    She is back on her feet and back at school.
    Her hair is back and her fake teeth are in.
    I tell her i love her and she is cool.
    To boost her confidence about the men.

    She has no faith in the way she looks.
    She is weak and tired and weary.
    She hides her "hideous" face in books.
    With the rumors her eyes get teary.

    But at least she's here to share the day.
    Her coffins empty for at least awhile.
    She doesn't eternally lay.
    And for her I would walk a mile.

    To you my Ashley, I'll always be there.
    Through thick and thin with moments to spare.
    If I lost you my heart would tear.
    Just to let you know, I do care.








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      makes me wonder if anyone would bother to say a word, or even an utter, had i been in that place, of support and warmth that is, everyone would jump to judge and kick me while i was down lower than before. She's lucky to have a friend that cares as much as you, even if it's only you, at least it's someone. now for the write, moving. with decent structure and corolation throughout the whole of it all. with such an apparent touchy subject i will remain from being to critical, besides, i couldn't tell you how, or what to improve anyways, take care
    | Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm, something tells me that I know who this is about. Reminds me of my wreck. Not really. No one really paid attention after my wreck. Hah. It was just kinda oh, she wrecked, she must've been drunk at 4 in the afternoon. Please don't pay mind to the fact that I flipped my car end over end 6 times and almost hit two telephone poles and almost died. *Takes a bow* Please just take into consideration that I am an unimportant teenager who obviously to of wrecked must've been under the influence of something.

    Anyways. This was good, just because you're getting out how you felt through a tribute to her. That's good. Very good. *Is in a mood*
    Maybe I shouldn't of commented. . this is a wierd comment.
    I apologize.
    I LOVE YOU CAT!
    ~Abby
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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