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    dots Submission Name: I Love Youdots

    Author: PiecesOfMyHeart
    ASL Info:    14/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 22/21/9
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 941
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       this really isn't like most of my other poems. it's alot happier and not really as, well, me, i guess. let me know what you think....thanks!

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    dotsI Love Youdots

    All I've ever wanted,
    but I've never had.
    All I've ever dreamed of.
    All that makes me sad.

    Everything I've hoped for,
    every day of every year.
    Everything I'd die to have.
    Everything I fear.

    Confusion engulfs my mind,
    consuming my heart too.
    Much easier to hate,
    but I can't, for
    I love You...

    Submitted on 2005-05-05 21:45:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is definately positive although I have to say that this takes me down memory lane as well. The simple rhyming and themes remind me of my early writes, not that they are bad, just similar. I think this is one of the best way to express feelings as not many people expect rhymes and when they get them, it's surprising, and I was still taken aback by some of the rhymes. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem. It makes me think of the feelings I have been going through. I actually like the repeation in this one too. It wasn't a over kill. Love is hard to love but we learn to do it even if it hurts to do so. Good Job! ~~Donna~~
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by ThatWasOnceMe | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it even I also find it easier to hate then to love but since nothing ever comes easy to me i have it eched in my mind to be a hard ass so i ALWAYS do everything the hard way and let me tell u it was very hard falling in love and STAYING in love with my boyfriend cuz he's a hard ass too but im gettin off the subject well great write
    hey do me a favor and read my poem " Follow Your Heart" youll understand where i'm comin from
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Darkwarrior | [ Reply to This ]

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