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    dots Submission Name: Violated (By Your Hate)dots
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    Author: BCute
    ASL Info:    23/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 1295/1417/363
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    I am violated by your hate,
    Your hideous crime now,
    What do you, what did you,
    Hope to achieve through this.
    I am ripped open painfully,
    And, you slowly become unglued,
    Through your perverse lust,
    As you push my innocence farther away,
    Your wrongful deed makes me bleed,
    Causes my lifetime of regrets.
    I try to push you up and away,
    You hold me down harder then before,
    My quiet cries don’t pierce the icy exterior,
    Of the callous around your heart.
    I am broken by what you are,
    And, my soul is numb from what you’ve done,
    Echoing in my head that it’s my fault,
    The voices tell me that it is.
    I still feel your hands- on me,
    Hear your breath in my ear,
    I can’t make it go away ever,
    Lay shaking violently in the aftermath,
    Try to push out the present memories.
    I am tortured by guilt that you laid on me,
    People say it isn’t my fault,
    I die trying to believe them.
    Bruised into the innermost core,
    Look at what you’ve done to me,
    Stand back and survey your masterpiece,
    Took place on a couch three feet away from me,
    You could’ve beat me at least,
    Could’ve screamed and made my ears bleed,
    But, you stole what meant the most to me,
    Forced my fall from grace upon me,
    Wasn’t quite ready for this,
    Not this way, didn’t dream it could be,
    I am shaking, broken, bruised, beyond repair,
    I am violated by your hate.




    Submitted on 2005-05-06 02:24:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I would have to agree that breaking it into stanzas would make an easier read, but the main point of the poem is still there. I don't typically like poems with metaphors, but I do like yours. Strong point and solid work. Good job.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so great. It has to go right to my favorites list. There are so many lines that I just love completely...

    I am broken by what you are
    And my soul is numb from what you've done...

    Bruised to the inner most core
    Look at what you've done to me.

    I can see this poor, tired, tortured, little girl letting these words fall out of her on tormented tears. Screaming at the top of her lungs to this pathetic piece of man that isn't even listening.
    And then the oh so simple line of

    I am violated by your hate. Beautiful. Great write, bcute. I love it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]
      ahhh. hauntin you still and probably forever. sooo sad and next time i see him, and he just happens to fall down a great embankment, you'll know that i was somehow behind the scenes. too bad that freakin weirdo has a kid with someone too young for him. anyways, u get the point before i continue my rant and anger chant. (note: concert is tomorrow, hehehe, and princess bride is tonight) talk to u later babe.

    ~Cat~
    And thanks for the poem about me, it has seriously made my day. "An angel weeping" is now my all time favorite.
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]
      why didn't u divide it into stanzas did u not think it would be easier to read. i foun reading it very hard which means i didn't enjoy it mutch. thats what i think poems should contain, easy to read and pleasurable!
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by The41stSmibble | [ Reply to This ]


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