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    dots Submission Name: Dear Lifedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       THe end talks about how wanting to do the things I have done in the past may change today and may keep me from tommorrow...but this overall is about life...I dunno it is completely open to interpretation.


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    dotsDear Lifedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Dear Tommorrow,
    When I see you can I possibly embrace what you have for me
    I am willing to interpret each emotion
    but spare me please
    let me live
    let me be there on getting by today
    let me cry with you
    let me smile
    above all just let me be

    Dear Today,
    I see you and I wonder if this is where I am supposed to me
    I want to change it all
    I want to embrace it only if it makes me happy
    but this is selfish...and will only keep me in yesterday...somewhere I don't want to be
    locked up in a memory
    I am afraid of changing today...and tommorrow




    Submitted on 2005-05-06 08:53:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love your poetry it's amazing
    Even read your journal that so ordinary and fantastic that its extraordinary
    you're brilliant
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    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
      well done! delicate theme in a well cresened light. LIke how you left it to interpretation, this seemingly posses many. seemed to be a typo or 2 though. probabily would have done a couple things slightly different, but that's what make us, and everyone else on this site different.
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      i like your poem...i have written a similar one that im gonna post in a minute called "Dear Die-ary"...i ike your poem cuz its full of emotion and purity of heart...most of my poems are depressed and i never write happy poems
    <3 Krin
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Krinchinian | [ Reply to This ]
      but this is selfish...and will only keep me in yesterday...somewhere I don't want to be
    locked up in a memory

    I really liked this line the most out of the entire poem, though I did like the entire poem over all. This talk about just trying to get through the day, making the next even better and hoping you can just get through. All or most of us have been there, heh I know I have. But I think for this specific topic you portrayed the emotion pretty well.

    There was one thing I noticed and i think it's probably a typo, so I'm going to point it out so you can fix it if you want.

    I see you and I wonder if this is where I am supposed to me

    I think "me" is supposed to be the word "Be." If not then don't correct it, but just wanted to let you know in case you hadn't noticed. Other than that great writing and keep it up.

    --Geremy--
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Geremy Smith | [ Reply to This ]


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