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    dots Submission Name: Ashes in the Winddots
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    Author: Sun
    ASL Info:    18/m/tn
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 43/54/14
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    dotsAshes in the Winddots
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    Harvested from the earth
    and back again
    were allways flowing
    like ashes in the wind

    she played a sad solemn song
    to please her god
    but he grew angry again
    ashes in the wind

    he told us we could live forever
    if we could only have remained
    so ignorant it might have been true
    now were left to wonder why

    crying after death
    looking for the light the elders described
    no sign of it. just like in life, and
    now in death; wondering again
    like ashes in the wind.




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