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    dots Submission Name: Astral Planedots

    Author: Sun
    ASL Info:    18/m/tn
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 43/54/14
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1370
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I feel this is my best way to describe the feeling of lonelyness and the desire to find the missing hole that punctures all of us. enjoy!

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    dotsAstral Planedots

    mind from body
    a soul on fire
    soaring through the fabric of the universe
    longing to find
    this thing unknown
    a deep desire
    to believe
    my mind and soul travelling through existance
    like two lovers
    inseperable by space and time
    ever searching
    always searching
    for more.
    A distance inmeasurable
    stretching my astral cord
    to the point of breaking.
    So close i can feel its warmth
    a knowledge of existance
    and then all at once...
    letting go...
    I open my eys and take a deep breath
    reflecting on my travels
    And remembering that reaccuring feeling...
    of disappointment.

    Submitted on 2005-05-06 09:57:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I truly understand this and I genuinely love it. I myself am obsessed with the astral plane and this is the first poem I've ever read that actually touches on its existance.
    | Posted on 2007-11-21 00:00:00 | by paintingangels | [ Reply to This ]
      I definately like this. It was very deep. It could have been a little confusing to some people. I just thought it was great, it pulled my right in. You drew a picture in my mind. Good work!
    | Posted on 2005-05-16 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it even though i sort of don't understand it all...i've had that feeling where something is unattainable yet sooo close but it elludes us...good write
    | Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Dead_inside187 | [ Reply to This ]
      that was a great poem...i think?? im soo confused!it is a lot better than anything i could do, its better than that shakespear person
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by angle of dusk | [ Reply to This ]
      I've had alot of these same feeling in my search for
    answers about life. You do a great job in opening
    your heart up and expressing how you feel. Your
    Poetry reminds me of some of mine. You should
    read some. Welcome to the site.
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      it was good but there are a few spelling mistakes but other then that the lines are very powerful"soaring through the fabric of the universe
    longing to find
    this thing unknown" the line is so ture, a lot of us are always looking for some thing that we don't know
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow its kinda a weird write but it seems to be full of emotion. Strange in many ways yet full of truth that is how this write seems to me
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]

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