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Father of Mine


Author: k.o.malley
ASL Info:    28/female/seattle
Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 50 /66 /30
Words: 254
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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It has been 13 years since I have seen my father, the last time we encountered each other I left broken to say the least. However we maintain a good phone friendship like old friends. But 6 months a go my youngest brother commited sucide, this is the second son my father has lost to sucide. I wrote this because no matter what he is my dad and i love him I have to, so that I am able to love myself too.


Father of Mine



Father of mine,
Please listen carefully to the child that still cries out for her daddy.
The little girl who sits on your knee,
Will always be a part of me.

Father of mine,
Please feel free to disagree, but it seems to me that you continue to live by struggling.
As you know, I have made the same mistake,
I believe it's safe to say I inherited that trait.

Father of mine,
Please know that it would be an honor for me if you could allow yourself to lean a bit onto me.
Notice that my senses are keen, my will is focused,
But most of all notice my character carries your strength alongside of me.

Father of mine,
Please tell me that it's not the distance between us that keeps you so far from me.
Forgive my reasoning, but what else could it be,
Except your fear of losing me, and of course my fear of repeating our history.

Father of mine,
Please try to understand, your not just the man who's blood flows through my veins, Not just the man I see in the mirror everyday, It's not just any man that I think of in so many ways.
You are the man that is a part of me, what I have been, what I am, and what I am meant to be.
No matter what, the greatest parts of the man you are,
Shine brilliantly throughout me.





Submitted on 2005-05-06 13:29:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I loved your description first off ....Needing to love him so you can love yourself ...thats very powerful ..and very true ..I have the same thing with my Dad....This is such a well written poem...i can almost picture someone kneeling ....begging ...just for something ...
Anyway ill stop my rambling now ...Wonderful job and i enjoyed the read
| Posted on 2005-05-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem took me back abruptly... captured my full attention and so sorry that the subject is true my condolence. How can someone critique this type of pain and love and hope? I can't ...I read what you said and God bless you and yours always smile, Cheryl.
| Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
  the writing - very good. the honesty - very brave and impressive. i like the repetative structure alot, too. it makes each verse stand alone as an individual statement, but at the same time makes all of the verses connected. mucho groovy :)
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow... this touches me in so many ways... It's been 9 years since my father and I have seen each other or spoken to each other... I wish we could have a relationship... but that's impossible because of his choices in life. I have sent him pictures of his grandchildren and will send him pictures of future ones, but he still refuses to respond.

Oh well, I've done what I can.

I'm sorry to hear that you've lost two brothers, that has to be heartbreaking... I couldn't imagine life without my brother, even though he can get a bit annoying, as all brothers can...

I wish you the best with your father... hopefully he can grow to rely on you for support when he needs it... sometimes just you being there is all he will need... so don't give up on him.

The poem was great... the flow, rhythm, and rhyme seemed to be just right for a work like this. Keep up the great work.. I look forward to reading more...

Unicorn.
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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