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    dots Submission Name: Copper Penny Wishdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       I through a copper penny in the fountain/pond @ work and wished for the f@!*&$ rain to GET OUT of Northern Cali and for sunshine & smiles for all Elitists ; > )

    Happy Mother's Day Mommies!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsCopper Penny Wishdots
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    The Copper Penny
    fell down the 2nd story walk
    a
    l
    l
    i
    n
    gleaming
    wish....
    rippled waters
    of expectation




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      This is really good Tiff. I love the format.. and the idea of the penny being a wish of expectation... "rippling waters" was good wording.. I liked that.
    A nice write.. Enjoyable!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe, i like this. pretty cool, the whole (grr, have to copy the whole poem):

    "The Copper Penny
    fell down the 2nd story walk
    a
    l
    l
    i
    n
    gleaming
    wish...
    rippled waters
    of expectation"

    the way you have "falling" spelled out with the first letter of each line. kind of makes you think. think of what though? anyway, good write. ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~TaY~
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hoo hoo hoo hoo an Epipharu! :) Another gift of writing and yeah I surprised that you guys got rain...usually there's a permanant rain cloud over us here <exept when it's a snow cloud :P : P :P>
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      Like the style you wrote this in tiff very original to me and a mind teaser at worst with a great message that drop like water drops slowing then hitting hard bursting with information. Deep and very reflective poem you got here girly lol. I liked this about your poem "The Copper Penny
    fell down the 2nd story walk
    a
    l
    l
    i
    n
    gleaming
    wish....
    rippled waters
    of expectation" always write poetry, Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, I too tire of all this rain. Isnt this supposed to be "sunny" CA??? Rain, rain go away...it will...but its supposed to be back Sunday. Oar well. At least the fields are green, green, green. May your wish come true. Shabbadee-Shabbadoo...you are natures voice and for that she blesses you.
    Have a great one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you've invented a new poetry form...an EPIPHARU. I'm getting to like the falling letters, might try it.
    Nice description of a wish (rippled waters of expectation - nice!)
    Wish on, Tiff! and
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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