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Author: xtremegentleman
ASL Info:    22/m/FL
Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595 /778 /82
Words: 171
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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Even in my absence from Elite, people are still stopping by the page and dropping some nasty comments.

This is a notice to the fans that I ain't gone nowhere and a warning to the haters... "Don't Wake Me Up".


Still here y'all!
How could you forget about X
That's like a virgin who gets laid
And just forgets about sex

Will never happen
Rather I'm writing or rapping they clapping
And rather I'm here or away
I see the haters still yapping

Don't wake me up cause if you do
Then I'm coming for you
If it fits then wear it
Like a comfortable shoe

I call this freestyle writing
My fingers learn and recite it
You like it! You get excited
At the second I type it.

I still got a little juice
My pen still got some use
Haters couldn't hang with me
If I gave them the noose

You topping me is unlike-Lee
Like my first name is Bruce
I'm just showing off the skills
This one ain't written for you

But if you ever think about me
Hit the page, say what's up
But I'm sleeping right now people
So please don't wake me up.

Submitted on 2005-05-06 15:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey this is an "ILL" piece man..its so straight in your face and no beating around the bush!I dig its authoritarean...stance...The flow is so radical!I dig the piece...guess I also dont want to wake up..when Im dreaming about wonderland!Big up...Nobantu
| Posted on 2005-08-03 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked this and i have to say i'm surprised by that but when i started reading it , i could hear the beat in my head as if it was be rapped to me.
great job Lainie
| Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it alot. I like how you said " Haters couldn't hang with me even if I gave them a noose." that was beautiful...i like it very much...I know exactly what you mean...When haters are hating but they can't fade keep on rapping ...I hope to hear some more of your things...and look out for some of mine.
| Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Xantin | [ Reply to This ]
  You topping me is unlike-Lee
Like my first name is Bruce
I'm just showing off the skills
This one ain't written for you

This sucks! LOL
How does it feel??? People are basically saying that your writing has turn to SHIT.......the plot thickens LOL.......This is true entertainment really are a playwright aren't you??????
| Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]
  I want to agree with hyproglo...I miss the writings about love and paranoia. They were the poems that best touched my heart. The rest of it is good...yet it is all retaliation. That is something that every once in a while...people like to read...but when that is all you do lose readers. I miss the stuff that I would add to my favorites and actually be in awwwwww after I read it.

You have freestyling skills. I will never deny that. But a freestyle love poem...Yup yup...that's what I'm waiting for.

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah, u know i'm gonna say 'good job' in a rap by now, don't ya:
don't leave the craft
if the craft ain't left you
you're arm went dead
don't let you're brain sleep too
don't leave us on skills
without a mentor either
you the jay-z here so
if to keep you calls for an ether
i'll take up the pen
and go up against the king
i'll stay on your case
like "precious wants your ring"
slander you and man-handle
every rap you wrote
just to let you know
its cuz we don't want you to go
| Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
  i hope this ain't about/for what/who i think it is... anyway, i guess you had to make a comeback. seriously though, you gotta do like fab said "erase them haters, and underestimaters". just brush it off and keep going. don't let the little things get to you. but anyway, this is good.

| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  Testify xtreme lol wow this was great freestyle presentation and just think you did this to make a moral point lol...don't mess with the writing "G" cause his pen is sharper than the deadliest sword...keep writing and rapping and congratulations on your directing debute and break a leg is that what they say in show bizness?
`always write poetry, Cheryl.
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
  lol, awesome X. only one thing, technically it's not *free style* poetry, because in poetry definitions that would mean it is lacking a rhyme scheme which this is not...anyway, lol, this was wickedly awesome. I missed reading your stuff! lol. See you around!
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  Sometimes hate can produce great writing and you showed that here. Many people can take that hate and write about it, and many do. Its kind of like you hate being hated but enjoy it at the same time and reciprocate it in fashionable rhyme. Hey, that rhymed, HA! At least thats what I got out of this. But there is only so much hating that can go on before it gets as old and stale as bread will do...before you know it, it produces spores of bacteria that will overwhelm the entire loaf...and soon you will be forced to throw the bread away, ya know? Anyway, I enjoy your writings about love and pot paranoia fears too and wish I could read more of that from you...for you do have talent. Whats that old saying, with great power comes great responsibility...
Anyway, just rambling. Have a good one and keep writin'.
| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Tu estilo me gusta. Es muy vibrante. Creo que necesitas trabajar en la descripcion. Usas ejemplos que son conocidos a ti pero no a mi.

| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by johnny boy | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude, I love this. There is so much feeling in every line. I love the wording. You are really talented. I have nothing negative to say. Great job :-)

| Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  Rather I'm writing or rapping they clapping
And rather I'm here or away
I see the haters still yapping

lol typical hip hop language.

If it fits then wear it
Like a comfortable shoe

cmon man think of something better than that.
but i aint tripping cause i got some messed up [censored] printed too

You topping me is unlike-Lee
Like my first name is Bruce
I'm just showing off the skills
This one ain't written for you

that was like a 4 th graders playground hymn
you keep writing [censored] like that, and your little reign "as king" might come to an end
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]

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