Description: Well #6…you told me to write…and now all I can do is sit and wait...paranoid about this cruddy piece...
It kind of has a rhyme scheme, except in that one stanza...ya...anyway...say what you'd like
I remember a time like that. But its amazing how quickly some things end. It inspires some great poetry though. I really like this. I dont even know what else to say but Great Job :-)
this illustrates school yard crushes and romances quite well. The simple structure of the poem allows for the reader to be projected into the memories of such imagined romances and feel the pain of not knowing how to make things work and reveal their adoration.
I'm sorry if this actually happened... and paranoia really sucks i know, i'm crazy. (just kidding, but i am always paranoid.) So this a was really good, again it is better than i can write. so you see you should keep writing, cause you write awesome stuff. THNX
sooooooo sad . . . i no what this feels like and its not nice at all - i loved the red theme you had going "Turning the deepest shade of red Crayola has ever known", "My heart cries a crimson tear" - it's one colour representing two distinctly different feelings: i love you so much and yet you make me bleed inside( cozin pain). Well written Keep spreading the love Nadia*
I understand your feeling. Other have loved me but i can't have them for other reasons. You did very good. I have had many crushes where you watch every move they make and all you can do is look at them and pretend not to love yet you love very much. Good job
"And when class is over You give me a hug Assure me that you love me And there’s nothing I prefer
Than to feel you near But I’ll know you’ll never be mine And each time I see you smile My heart cries a crimson tear"
that's pretty, but sad at the same time. i'm curious though, as to why this person would tell you that they love you if you can't have them? any prior relationship with this person? anyway, i think it was very well written, the rhyme scheme was kind of in and out, but hey, it works. it's not cruddy at all! i think we've all been there at one time or another. ...bb...
Submission Name: Secret Crush
