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    dots Submission Name: Soar to the Impossibledots
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    Author: Jengrr
    ASL Info:    20/McBain
    Elite Ratio:    5.85 - 95/104/22
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 949
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 493



    Description:
       When I wrote this, I've had a lot of people downing on my dreams, and on the dreams of others, 100% pessimistic, and I decided some people needed to be reminded that it doesn't matter what others say, just follow your dreams!


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    dotsSoar to the Impossibledots
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    There is no boundary in the clouds
    No hopeless bonds to tie dreams down
    So let them rise now to the sky
    And heed no earthly-bidden cry
    Let them soar to worlds unknown
    And discover triumph of their own
    There is no pain with shining stars
    Nor chains to bind them from afar
    Loose the bird now from its cage
    Where doubt and worry ever rage
    Climb higher, ever higher still
    And watch the dreams with hope fulfilled




    Submitted on 2005-05-06 20:47:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My, aren't we the optimist? BAH HUMBUG!!!! just kidding. I like the meter, its written perfectly. long/short syllables exactly where the need to be. I like the rhyming too. I missed reading your poems. Nice work.

    SAM
    | Posted on 2007-05-02 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem. Makes me feel like I can do anything I want to do, and I like that, I mean I have always known that I can but this reminds me.

    So after I wrote that first part there I went up and read your description and realized that's exactly what you intended!

    Great, and I'm glad you got that, and I'm glad you gave it to me. Thanks.

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-04-27 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
      Hurray for inspiration!

    This is the only poem formed from rhymed couplets that I've actually liked. I usually hate rhyming poetry, but this flows really well.

    I do agree with Abby's comment on "Loose the bird now from its cage". It doesn't read quite right. I would have written it as "Loose now the bird from its cage" but then again I adore playing with syntax.

    Rather good in any event. I'll read some of your depressing things later I suppose. When you're friends with Betsy you get used to the dark stuff, so it's nice to get away from that every now and then. Considering that dark and depressing is about half of what I write as well, I like to read some uplifting ones every now and again.

    Thanks for sharing Jen.
    | Posted on 2007-01-17 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      very inspirational poem, i love the description of the "worlds unknown" it's very skillfully written and inspired a lot of mental images as i read this, and dealt with an interesting theme which is the mark of an excellent poem. well done
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by freeangel | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful piece! absolutely light and lifting... this is definitely going to be added to my favorites list....
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by Sacred Sindy | [ Reply to This ]
      Jen - I loved this piece. The concept in the poem was something I could relate to from my days in highschool. I do have one question for you - why did you decide upon "fulfilled" at the end of the poem, as opposed to "fulfill"? Fulfilled does sound better...but I want to hear why you chose it over fulfill. Ciao, Kelly
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a compelling and motivating piece. This is something I can see framed and hung up on the wall as a reminder that anything can be accomplished...that you can acheive anything. A good friend once told me, "The only thing that can hold you back is you." and I'm a strong believer in that concept. This was wonderful. Be well
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-07-20 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really beautiful and so optimistic.. it gives me great reminder that dreams do have wings and we can let them fly and soar. hope is always close by and we only need let her in..
    thanks for this gem.
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-07-12 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there! This poem is absolutely beautiful! What a truly inspirational, touching write! And ya know, things have been tough lately and I needed a good poem and I certainly found it here! I had to read it a couple times as it is just great and now it will be on my faves list so I can read it again! (I'm sure I'll need it!) Awesome job here!
    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-07-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I'm glad I looked back a ways. I don't make many favorites, but other people seem to read mine, so I need to give others the inspiration that this poem gave me.
    Jen, this is SENSATIONAL!
    Excellent poem, well done!
    be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good writing and I even agree with the description you presented with the poem. I do say always hang on to your dreams and never let anyone discourage you from doing so. You never know they just might come true. I believe life is what you make it to be and therefore your dreams can come true.
    This poem was short but very powerful and I commend you an an excellent job writing it.
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      YOur are truly an amazing poet. I love reading your work...I do appologize for commenting so much, I know it brings your reciprocated % down...But you can comment on my peices if you want, and that'll bring it back up...keep writing...SAM
    | Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an axcellent write and I loved the way you expressed your description for the poem. If I might make a suggestion I think I would call it "Boundless Dreams" because it just seems to fit the poem ...to me anyway. I enjoyed reading it and I think it is fine just the way it is, other than needing a title. I look forward to reading more of your work.
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      all people should read this. very inspirational. although some people would read it and be like "so what, im not like this" but even i know that i do it. and u kinda put it into perspective for me and for that i thank you. u are good, but on the line that said "loose the bird from its cage" u might need to reword it because it kinda caught me up. somethings just not quite right. good job though.

    ~Abby~
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      This is in fact a very inspirational poem, and it kind of motivates you as you read it. I can relate to the theme, been in that situation before where you have all these dreams you want to accomplish and think you can but thereís negativity around you that diminishes that thought of overcoming them and itís heart- breaking and sad, but you have to learn to follow your heart all the way through and reach for the stars. I really enjoyed it, good job. Looking forwarding to reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Sun Spots | [ Reply to This ]


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