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    dots Submission Name: Can't Stop Thinking of Youdots
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    Author: Kitty
    ASL Info:    14/F/Vermont
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 23/29/12
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 779
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1403



    Description:
       This sucks and it's pretty much just all my thoughts about this guy. It's the usual and average, but had to write something about him.


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    dotsCan't Stop Thinking of Youdots
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    Everytime I see you
    Oh God how I feel
    You make my heart beat
    that much faster

    I swallow hard
    Breath gets heavy
    Knees feel weak

    And I dream of your hands
    so big, not like mine
    Don't be afraid
    Just touch me
    Hold me
    Oh those hands

    I close my eyes
    and I see you
    Your crooked smile
    Your crazy personality

    I swallow hard
    Breath gets heavy
    Knees feel weak

    And I dream of your hands
    so big, not like mine
    Don't be afraid
    Just touch me
    Hold me
    Oh those hands

    Open your eyes!
    I want you!
    Don't you get?
    Let go of her
    Look at me

    I swallow hard
    Breath gets heavy
    Knees feel weak

    And I dream of your hands
    so big, not like mine
    Don't be afraid
    Just touch me
    Hold me
    Oh those hands

    I'll wait
    I'll be here
    When you come 'round
    When you notice how I look at you
    Only you

    I swallow hard
    Breath gets heavy
    Knees feel weak

    And I dream of your hands
    so big, not like mine
    Don't be afraid
    Just touch me
    Hold me
    Oh those hands




    Submitted on 2005-05-06 21:21:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thank you, thank you very much. I guy I wrote this about and his best friend enjoyed it very much too. At least they're nice people.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      ok i think that this is really good and the repetition of the stanza's worked out really well and created this desperate need for this person to notice her to see her. thats great its real and raw great job
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is really good. I definetly can relate to what you're feeling in this poem. I really like the affect of repeating the stanza:
    And I dream of your hands
    so big, not like mine
    Dont be afraid
    Just touch me
    Hold me
    Oh those hands.

    -Selene
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, I think I get it, a circle, and endless circle. So he's got someone else, huh? Too bad, but your heart's in the right place. Hang in there
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-05-06 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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