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    dots Submission Name: If I Were a Turtledots

    Author: Kitty
    ASL Info:    14/F/Vermont
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 23/29/12
    Words: 303
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
    Total Views: 807
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       Say what ya please. I wrote this when me and My friend were uber hyper. I think this just might be the best peice ever written. lol!

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    dotsIf I Were a Turtledots

    If I were a turtle
    I'd spend all my time in walmart
    stealing hit clips so my shell would be a groovy pad
    Then I'd steal shots, and they would be like pints to me in my turtle mind
    Me and my pals would get mad drunk in that Irish way
    and forget our problems (except Kay, who's pants can't lie)
    I'd hide in my shell from the law
    and walmart employees
    and they would think me a little toy
    Then, I would break into a school art room
    and it would take me
    from the time school ended on Friday
    to the time it started on Monday
    To pour glue on the table
    Then, I would subsequently roll in it
    Then, I would roll in glitter and sequins and rhinestones
    Then I'd spend a week walking
    no make that a month
    walking to NEYT
    Where I'd be a star
    singing "Big Spender"
    I would be the first turtle to sing
    and not only to sing, but sing showtunes
    and not only to sing showtunes, but to sing them well
    and not only to sing showtunes well, but to choreograph my own dances
    Then, I'd marry someone famous
    Such as that owl from Harry Potter
    or those birds from the window commercial
    you know, where larry or whatever runs into the glass
    all the time
    We'd then have those flying turtle things from Mario Bros.
    as our babies
    We'd name them Luigi and Princess Peach
    Then we'd eat mushrooms and get coins from the clouds
    Then I'd be old
    and it no longer would be the 70's
    I'd die in my little shell listening to Aaron Carter
    and leave a legacy of turtle birds
    who marry the dragon donkeys from Shrek Two
    And that is my biography of my life as a

    Submitted on 2005-05-06 21:32:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, thank you, all of you. I like it's unflowyness though. It adds to the fact I'm an odd odd girl and I can produce good writing with a friend's inspiration, especially while we are peeing our pants and tears are streaming down our faces. It was beautiful.
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      Itís creative like a flash movie. In fact I think itíd be a perfect for flash. I like the randomness of the story, a lot, but I could do with a bit more time spent time spent on the over all flow, and word choice. Iím glad I clicked on this one, it made me laugh.
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cloud_lion | [ Reply to This ]
      it was very funny i was laughing at most points i think it was very creative and i love tutles also lol. the only thing i would have differently was rhyming at a few parts.
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by tickles8 | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL, this was pretty amusing. The one bad thing I can say about it is that the flow was a bit off at points in this. But other then that this is very amusing and good.
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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