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    dots Submission Name: A Little less Than Humandots
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    Author: EternitysLyre
    ASL Info:    20/M/Taiwan.
    Elite Ratio:    7.13 - 151/168/42
    Words: 349
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Love song for no one.


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    dotsA Little less Than Humandots
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    "Hello, hello, please walk on by, I'm dreaming up my lullabye,
    So sleep will swiftly gather all my airs
    And like the evening, carry off, to clouds where conscience never scoffs
    The smiles through which our eyes become corsairs."
    ~To Katt.


    "A little shooting star remembers eighteen years of wishes,
    For on the day they all came true its lifelong work was done;
    An innocent memento, trailing furtive, endless kisses
    Across the sky in hopefulness though it was only one.
    Yet air, like ocean, never halts its soundless sway or swishes
    And time, like evening never comes in leisure but a run.

    "With lights cavorting, worries drowned by voices, color, feet
    Drenched in sapphire, soaked in jade and bathed in ruby-red
    Like alcohol, and whiskey-laced intoxicating beats
    Where Jazz itself the clock enchants and seconds freeze like lead
    Oh, where the shadows hidden, meek, in alcoves of defeat
    Reside is where I find my soles in solitude, instead.

    " 'Midst swaying, waltzing, prancing, as sweet time takes honey-hues
    While others chat the hours away, for laughter steals the night,
    The moon lost somewhere 'yond the roof, forgotten in the blues
    A final haven (for our souls abandon thought for flight).
    Yet if the dance floor frees from life reality, imbued
    It's dancers, 'cool ones,' on the left, leave one man on the right.

    "And drinks abound the sights and sounds as fragrances enflame;
    Where logic lies, asphyxiate, and passion enchants hearts
    A turn of fate reminisces the never-ending game
    Of fear of loss, and lonliness, where arrogance restarts--
    The twighlight tincture, terminal, reveals that pride's to blame
    Why happiness and confidence are ninety miles apart.

    "So hearing now my story, with my back against the wall,
    You smile, pacing timidly away from sharp acumen;
    And though my stance is ramrod-straight, my shadow seems to fall--
    Of mankind's social voyager I cannot be a crewman,
    My wistfulness a stagger in the fever of it all;

    "For now you understand, I'm just

    A little less than human."




    Submitted on 2005-05-06 23:06:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love song for no one? lol...
    Well you don't have to be in love to write a love song. ;)

    Well I have to tell you, I really admire this, and it was an enjoyable read. You write really beautifully, and your usage of specific words evoke dream like, starry fantastical images, which I always like.

    lullabye is actually spelt lullaby though, twighlight is twilight...

    I've read this a second time now, and I really like it... Im adding it to my faves.
    I find the title and the way it ends a bit melancholy though, sad.. but thanks for the wonderful read. You seem capable of writing very good stuff, judging by this piece.
    Cheers.
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]



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