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    dots Submission Name: When Men Ruled the Worlddots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This speaks of men in both the sense of patriarchal rule and broader concept of human kind. It is written from the vantage of a different future looking back through our time. I am sharing this as Mother's Day thoughts on our other mother, the earth. This was written in a free flowing session. I think I would like to tighten it up a bit. Suggestions are appreciated.


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    dotsWhen Men Ruled the Worlddots
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    If it was 2051 you may not remember but,

    There once was a time when men ruled the world.
    There was hunger and war.
    The earth lay bleeding from rape.
    They ignored her pain and raped her again.

    Where had the caring gone?
    Was there no control or was it no soul?
    There once was a time when men ruled the world,
    but where was the rule of love?

    Waste, want and welts of wealth
    raised across the earth.
    The excess piled in hills of greed
    and the excess piled in heaps of need.
    Religion stole their souls.

    A light shone round about them
    and a voice spoke within,
    God is love is all it said.
    They ignored the voice and raped again,
    their own mother, their best friend.

    The voice spoke louder now
    God is love it said.
    Some looked up and saw their mother’s pain.
    We must stop them before she’s dead
    and said, never again.

    They rose against the rapist
    they fought against the sin.
    They stood between their mother and the men.
    They heard the voice within.
    The rule of love now begins.

    You may not remember but there was a time
    when men ruled the world.
    Please never forget.
    There was a time
    when men ruled the world.




    Submitted on 2005-05-07 10:55:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      if 'men' here does not entirely mean what it is, this is an effective poem. I sincerely hope that we will finish our own race within the next hunfred years- so there will be no earth, no humans, no pain and no crying for 'mother nature'. It is useless AND baseless. the presence of humans, or say ANY living thing equals destruction. If we want to live, ANY number of trees we protect, or the forests we try to preserve HAVE to eventually fall against our demands of space and luxury. People(poets) like me and you find it easy to just sit and write what men are doing is not good(we actually can do nothing to stop it- it is inevitable and perpetual), but infact, the truth of GOD's presence will surface only with total annihilation.
    I pray to GOD,if there be any, to kill us all before we do it ourselves.
    -Devrath
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Devrath | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminded me a bit of John Lennon's 'Imagine', in that the central message is one of hope, maybe lost with all the images of the brutality we have inflicted on our own 'mother', our earth, but that is still there. I like how you distinguished between God and religion, that was very interesting... very powerful, raw and shocking images... especially comparing humanity to a rapist...
    thanks for such an insightful piece to read...

    'they heard the voice within'
    God I hope so...
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      Hay, I really like this peice. It was so descriptive in showing the physical pain that we have put are own world through.

    I like how you mention "hills of greed". This is a very powerful image and it sums up a major reason why the planet is in such disarray.

    Also, I like how in the second tot he last stanza you gave the peice a sense of hope. Hope is a good thing, but I do believe that as long as humans occupie Earth, then are greed will overtake us and the planet will never get time to truly heal. I still like how you ended on a more positive note, maybe you could say something about even through it all Mother Earth was still beautiful or something like that.
    Maybe in the body of the peice you could mention something about cutting her limbs. This could be representative of deforestation. Maybe you could also say something about poisoning her food and air. Maybe even say how we are scarring her body through the building of cities and industrialize urban societies. I think that visual images like these could make your peice a lot better, but all in all I really like your peice. It was very thought provoking and its central theme stood so bold. Very nicely gone. I'm going to add this one to my favorites.

    Thanks for the read, PEACE.
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]
      the laws of love and physics are the same such as this:
    that force does not diminish force it raises it's power, while this is simple, there is no doubt the equanimity of the earth is crying out. The egalitarian is begging to abide in our future, and I wonder at the thoughts you've found to illustrate how this might be done. simple, truths lie in the fact that people don't act out if they are getting what they need. And how did God get a gender anyway, without a body?
    nan
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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