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    dots Submission Name: Nature Prevailsdots
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    Author: jinx
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 44/58/26
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1000
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    Description:
       i think this needs a little background so people can understand. first of all, gaea is the greek god of the earth; she's essentially the mother of the earth. her and uranus (god of the sky) got together and had a baby. the baby was the earth. the earth = terra in latin.
    aprodite is the greek god of love, but the romans called her Venus. that's who the planet is named after. so essentially, gaea=mother nature, terra=the earth and aphrodite=Venus.

    now that that's been explained, i'm hoping you'll all understand this. i'm not used to writing such out-there poetry, but as i started to write this in my journal i realized its a really good poem topic. so, let me know what you think. (or if you dont understand)


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    nature prevails
    it does, i swear.
    we're all insecure teenage girls;
    we fake it.
    'we know what we're doing'
    but nature prevails.
    build a lonely tower
    watch it climb,
    watch it grow.
    build another tower
    and another.
    fill the sky with empty hearts
    with nothing in them
    but absolute power,
    they think.
    but nature prevails.
    have you ever felt
    that shiver from the sidewalk
    that tiny little shudder
    that's a secret in disguise?
    a volcanic sneeze
    tectonic surgery
    the planet's very own
    muscle cramps.
    and nature prevails.
    terra gets a haircut;
    gaea is a teenage girl-
    'remove this unsightly growth,
    me and aphrodite
    are going to a pool party.
    nature prevails.
    androids spent years
    destroying their mother,
    and in seconds
    she rips their thin roots from the ground
    like poetry.
    perfect.
    and just in time.
    aphrodite and gaea
    and littla baby terra
    spin off to their pool party
    where nature prevails.




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      Hmm...Is this portraying that we, humans, are destroying the Earth and nature and all its beauty, but in the end, nature always prevails, and so we'd be the ones to perish? If that is so, then this piece is restating the Theory of Gaea in poetic form. Honestly, I loved this. This piece should be read by all of us, because many people do not know how much they're hurting nature. I found one spelling error:

    "and littla baby terra" (little)

    The androids are the humans, correct?

    "have you ever felt
    that shiver from the sidewalk
    that tiny little shudder"

    "androids spent years
    destroying their mother,"

    Our Earth is dying, and we are the cause of its pain.

    This is a very appreciative poem to nature. Thank you for sharing.
    Best wishes,
    -Azrael
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    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by Tears of Azrael | [ Reply to This ]


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