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    dots Submission Name: The lighterdots

    Author: Tekin_Kashami
    ASL Info:    18/male/Houston, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 131/77/23
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1014
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 572

       Get the metaphor?
    *crosses fingers*

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe lighterdots

    <p>There stands in a room a lighter
    With an eagle's likeness on either side
    There stands in a room a lighter
    With amazing powers buried inside
    There stands in a room a lighter
    That is steady through fire and flood
    There stands in a room a lighter
    Clean in so much shimmering blood
    There stands in a room a lighter
    Shining with glory's flame
    There stands in a room a lighter
    That people see and are never the same </p>

    Submitted on 2005-05-07 15:13:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I read this poem as God bieng the lighter

    It was very beautiful and it showed that God can overcome all evil and negativity in the world

    Very Good write Tekin

    And thank you for your recent comments always look forward to hearing from you

    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      That sounded almost like a chant.
    And the repetition almost drilled the image of the lighter into my consciousness.
    Made you wonder if you were going to get hypnotized next....
    I had fun reading this one.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. It was a little blunt for my tastes. The imagery is rather straight forward. Oh, and you don't need the HTML tags. It sort of kills the mood having "</p>" so leave them out next time.

    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Deep_Monty | [ Reply to This ]

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