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Oh! to be like her till death


Author: darkness
ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524 /218 /40
Words: 117
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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this poem is about the saint rabiah basri

curses! ill jus blame the jumping subjects on my ADD


Oh! to be like her till death



Her smile would cheer the dead
Her tears sweet in repentence
gives hope for the deceased

The path i tread
Many a times those before have traveled

Till the soul shall leave this body to rot
Dwelling in the grave

The soul shall enter barzakh
a barrier between the living and the dead
awaiting jugement day

O to be like her
to be hopeful and mindful
to be wise as she

O the reality of this world
You shall soon come to see

Indeed life is but a journy
Death is but the beginning
and Destiny awaits in the hereafter








Submitted on 2005-05-08 14:57:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I just thought I would comment on this one again because I have more to say. Rabi'ah Basri is a hero to all. She was the one of the greates women . . . and not just because of her name. lol. Anyways, this one was really, truly great.

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Unperfect
| Posted on 2006-02-13 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really nice. We really think alike what can I say great minds think alike I like the end about Indeed life is but a journy Death is but the beginningand Destiny awaits in the hereafter. You really hit me their. Well that's all I got to say
| Posted on 2006-02-04 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  o o that is so awsumful! omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg omg...that was just so great ! i loved it sooo sooo sooo sooo muchhh ! great job !
| Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]


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