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    dots Submission Name: Dearest Mastersdots
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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 854
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    Description:
       this is just about people who i thought were my friends even though they always beat me down and i could never do anything to stop it.


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    dotsDearest Mastersdots
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    A thousand years may pass
    But still Iíll be waiting
    Holding onto my hope
    Itís glimmer slowly fading
    As a flowerís petals
    Fall without a sound
    So are my tears falling
    To drop upon the ground
    As the clouded sky
    Wheels over my head
    Long do I mourn about
    The place where I was lead
    To be a mere carrier
    And a servant unchained
    But bound to my masters
    With the friendship feigned
    I sit in the corner
    And I canít run away
    By their own cruel power
    They know I will stay
    They know I wonít leave
    Though they beat me down
    My pain is an anchor
    Weighing me down
    Like the chains in a cell
    My pain locks me in
    Keeps me close to my masters
    Itís a game I canít win
    To them itís all games
    Like cards or a race
    After theyíre done with me
    Who will take my place?
    Who will be their servant?
    Their blame for the world?
    Who will hate the life
    Into which they were hurled?
    But we must remember
    While we still have time
    At the end of all things
    They will pay for their crime




    Submitted on 2005-05-08 19:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      man...ive recently felt like this again and you put it into really really good wording, it hit real deep...i peronally like the ryming and just everything about it..it has a real kool wicked sound that comes off when i read it...well im sorry that your goin thro that [censored] and my bst wishes for you...
    ~mEdIcAtEd~*
    | Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      some of ur flow is kinda messed around but if u work on it im sure it can be even grater.. the main message shows through clearly
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by blahblahgurl | [ Reply to This ]


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