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    dots Submission Name: Just a thoughtdots
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    Author: hammyj
    ASL Info:    21/m/Notts UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 130/81/21
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
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    dotsJust a thoughtdots
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    I think back on where I've been and what I've done with my life..........
    The thought doesn't last long or take me back far!




    Submitted on 2005-05-09 07:02:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I guess that means that you have a life full of fun and adventure ahead of you. At least you should. Life is too short, take advantage. Jump a train or something. Carpe Diem, honey.
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an isolated thought. Complex, but short. It needs to be extended to a full poem. I think you used depth and complexity (and now I'm rambling to keep my feedback rating from plummiting) to trigger thought. I think you might need to use emotion to enhance it however. Decent, not the best I've read.
    | Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Tekin_Kashami | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple...very very simple. Just those two lines state a lot! You left the imagination open to soar. A simple statement that many think, yet you brought it to attention and are getting a response.

    Great!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      good but needs more poem.amazin starter.If you should decide to turn this into a full poem.I think it would have amazing emotion and visuals.im not sure of stanza's and puntutation cause i cant reallly tell at this momment.the wording you choose was simple and beautiful.And simple described your thoughts which was interesting!
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      That's usually the thought thats followed by a quick head shake and back to work.

    I'm never sure if it's healthy to dwell on things past, but I beleve that this thought passes through my own head every day.

    What's done is done and cannot be undone's for sure.

    Thanks for the quick thought, said as quickly.
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Sanny | [ Reply to This ]


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