Description: I do not know what to say about this piece but I think it is so clear for all that I'm so sad for breaking up with my fiancee.
It's not the end of the world
To break up with you.
Your choice to demolish every
sweet moment I imagined
To live with you.
You've harshly destoryed every thing.
I'll stop sheding tears on you.
You do not deserve this sweet thing.
It's my heart, the thing you
Have not pay any attention to.
Hah! I've dreamt of many things.
Rootless dreams based on nothing.
I'll never regret for leaving you.
But, you'll regret your whole life.
I know it wont be easy for me.
To forget and cure your injuries.
But, I'll find my missing soul.
I've a strong believe that
My soul-mate has not come yet.
She'll come some day and
Knock at my heart's doors.
I started this the other noght, but my sister nedced help, so I couldn't finish the comment. My initial feeling on this poem is that it is okay, and don't take this in a bad way/. The meesage in the poem is wonderful, and sad at the sametime, but I feel that although it is a personal experience that you need to write this poem in a universal aspect, so it is not just about you, but people who have been there can connect with the words painted.
It is hard for me to relate to this poem, because I am still at the age when not having a prom date is the most horrible thing! But I do sympathize with what you are going through, a part of me wishes i could better relate, but this is one thing I can't. but overall I thought the ideas, and some of the imagery was excellent, I think if it was reworded it would be amaazing, but that is just my thoughts, and you don't have to take them. much love kaity
Hi Khaled I know what you are going through (cuz I am going through same things). It is very nice poem; it is so strong and powerful. I wish I could handle the situation the way you are doing it. You have a very clear message and it is painful to read it. It hurts me and gives strength at the same time. Maybe you are right.
I know it wont be easy for me. To forget and cure your injuries. But, I'll find my missing soul. I've a strong believe that My soul-mate has not come yet. She'll come some day and Knock at my heart's doors.
That is my favourite part. I simply love the ending it is so encouraging. With lots of love and good wishes your shabnam