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Submission Name: Unwanted dots

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Author:	dancer06
ASL Info:	20/f
Elite Ratio:	4.73 - 232/171/44
Words:	50

Class/Type:	Poetry/Angry
Total Views:	249
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	444

Description:
umm grandma that left and never loved my mom, she left without knowing us. she doesn't even know i exist. hate.

Unwanted dots

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Absolute darkness,
Only feelings.
No light,
Just pain.

Feelings of hate,
Being unwanted,
Aloneness
Consume me.

Never met me.
No chance.
Odds low,
But so close.

Put me down,
Hateful silence,
Broken heart,
Hollow soul.

No longer here,
Dead inside.
No peace internally
No longer me.

Submitted on 2005-05-09 12:49:04 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was a great write straight to the point just how i like them, the hings this poems needs is better words to have it roll of the toung easier.
Great job
Ace
| Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
  I dislike this. Because I feel your pain for a reason. Although I won't go there. Abby never speaks of pain or past memories. *has decided to start reclusiveness again*

I'm sorry that you had to feel this way and I'm sorry that your mom and family has had to deal with the pain also.

Love,
~Abby
| Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  It's always difficult to deal with feelings of abandonment and I'm sure for your mother it was especially trying.
Sometimes you just can't truly know what drives other's actions and to hate and allow it to affect your well being is not your burden to carry. Her loss, her issues, her responsibility. I thought you did a nice job of relaying the feelings and I'm sure it was her loss! Love,Peace,Joy!
| Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Never met me.
No chance.
Odds low,
But so close.

That reminds me of my relationship with my father... although I have met him, I might as well not have wasted his time, he hasn't spoken to me since.

Great write... it really shows your pain, although i think you meant for it to be more of a hate thing. I don't know though, I'm not you... just my viewpoint.

Unicorn.
| Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Unicorn Poet | [ Reply to This ]

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