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    dots Submission Name: Suicide Notedots
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    Author: Krinchinian
    ASL Info:    20/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164/231/84
    Words: 337
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       this is a suicide note i've written when i've thought of suicide....i never actually tried....but i think about it alot


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    dotsSuicide Notedots
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    dear mother and father,
    i know this might come as a shocker,
    but by the time you recieve this letter,
    your life will be a whole lot better,
    just know that this is not your fault,
    that this was a full on assault,
    my life couldn't of got any worse,
    its as if i've been living a curse,
    ever since i was a little girl,
    poetrys been my way to unfurl,
    my way to let my feelings free,
    and i knew that you would disagree,
    i've kept this hidden well from you,
    for if i let my real feelings through,
    you would of sent me away,
    and wouldn't of listened to what i had to say,
    but if you just listen to me now,
    this is my last solemn vow,
    by the time you recieve this suicide note,
    i'll be laying on the floor with a slit throaght,
    so good bye my parents i love you,
    and just know that i've really thought this through,
    if there was another way id take it,
    but to this i must commit,
    for i've lived a life of depression,
    and i've had alot of built up agression,
    but these are my final words goodbye,
    and when the cops arrive at the scene,
    there will be no more beloved kristine

    sincerely your fifteen,
    dear Kristine




    Submitted on 2005-05-09 19:10:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this and i can really relate. i know that there are alot of people around us who don't like us and i know that there are also alot of a$$holes in the world so whatever. i know the feelings of wanting to die and i know what its like to be lying in the hospital after a failed attept of nose diving of the roof. so just keep trying to move on. i know that life gets hard but i know that after that last failed attempt and all the stuff that happenned right after that, that there is a way to live. whether its with someone, on your own, or just straight up homeless. maybe you parents didn't want to have to face want the were reading in your poems. maybe they didn't want to know that there baby was dying on the inside and crying for help through the poems she writes. i know that it is hard to talk to parents sometimes, especially about bad thing and hurtful subjects, but its okay because, well it just is. i think they'll understand what you have to say if you just sit down and talk to them. think about it.
    love tina
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i can really ralate to this i enjoyed it and i have had most of these thoughts myself i hope you dont mind me adding it to my favs you may not have tried but i have before and still have the scars to show for it they dont dissapear at all
    | Posted on 2005-05-15 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Much better, just run it through a spell check first and capitalize the "I"s. However bad you think everything is now, just remember that the fact that you have access to a computer puts you above over 50% of the world. Maybe on a microscopic level, things seem terrible, but think about the big picture. I'm sure there are great things meant for you; just not yet. Good luck.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      it is strange but i find it rather easy to say the same words. i remember when i first started writng it was impowering to be able to put down things like that on paper but i want to see that you can write about other things than pain like happiness you know what i mean... i mean ur 14 keeping the wiritng hidden is fine i still do it but being depressed is no way to live a life. i liked reading your poem it was well written.
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      You took the words right outta my mouth! I am a 15 year old girl, who has thought about suicide millions of times! I like the effort that sounds like you have put into this! Good one! Hope to hear more from you!
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was well very depressing. I really liked the feeling you put into this. but I hope you don't really mean to do this, there are so many other options. you aren't the only one who's been there sweaty. I 've been raped twice and the second time was just this last december of 04 and believe me I wished I haden't lived through the second time, I wished he'd killed me so that I'd never have to live with the shame, but the truth is life gets better no matter how bad it gets it always gets better in the end. I now have a boyfriend and we are expecting a child in January of 06.
    please think things through before making any rash decisions.
    Lost and alone
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]


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